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be creative,
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be more self-reliable.
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Student-designed projects allow students to be passionate about the topic they are working on, causing them to work efficiently.
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When students are assigned teacher-designed projects, they are not usually excited to work on the assignment. Additionally, they do not value it as important, leaving the work until the last minute. For example, in 7th grade, my Life Science class was assigned a project about the deer population in Virginia. Many of the students did not actively work on the project, as they found the topic boring. Because they did not understand the relevance of the topic, the students were not passionate about the project. An independent project assigned in my AP Lang class, however, had a different result. The assignment was to write a research paper on a social issue that interested us. Because students were able to write about an issue that interests them, they actively worked on the project. Being passionate about a project also affects a student's performance in class. For example, because the majority of the class was not passionate about the deer project, they did not do well on it. However, on the AP Lang assignment, the majority of the class did well on related assignments, as they were passionate about the projects they worked on.
Evidence
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Summer projects designed by students allow for creativity. Students are able to express themselves, as they are not restricted by strict guidelines the way they are with teacher-designed projects
Claim
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. Because of this reason, students are more likely to actively work on the project and put in more effort. For example, my AOS biology class was assigned a project to research and present information about a group of proteins. We were allowed to present this information in any way we wanted, allowing for creativity. The majority of the students were very excited to work on the project, as they thought of fun ways to present their information. Some students created songs to relay their information, whereas others made fun videos to do so. A few students even baked cakes to provide information about their proteins. Each student actively worked on their project and put in effort to make sure it was done well. The element of creativity allowed the students to see the assignment as a fun project, rather than as a boring task. Because the majority of the students worked hard on the project, they did well on it. Furthermore, they effectively retained the information they researched, allowing them to do well on the corresponding test.
Evidence
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By allowing projects to be student-designed, schools allow students to develop a sense of self-reliance. This is because the students have to conduct their own research in order to find a topic that interests them, rather than just receive a topic from the teacher
Claim
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For example, in elementary school, students come up with their own experiments to test, after which they present their findings at the science fair. By doing so, students learn how to depend on themselves to find information. Similarly, sophomores at the Generic_School take a research class. They work on a wide variety of projects that are mostly assigned by teachers, but towards the end of the year, they must come up with an independent research project that they will work on in their junior year. In order to choose their project, students have to conduct extensive research to understand the topic, as their project cannot have been done before. Additionally, they have to continue conducting research in junior year to allow for a wider understanding of the topic. This allows the students to be self-reliant, as they know more about their project than their teacher, who acts as a mentor. Self-reliance is a very important skill that helps people succeed in the community and workplace when they become an adult, so it is important to establish the skill early on.
Evidence
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Some people may believe that allowing students to design their own projects creates more work for teachers, putting stress on them. The teachers cannot have a uniform grading rubric and must have enough background knowledge on each student's topic in order to grade them fairly.
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However, by allowing summer projects to be student-designed, teachers do not have to come up with a topic themselves. Additionally, they are exposed to a wide variety of projects, allowing them to be more interested in the presented material. This allows teachers to be more likely to grade the projects fairly, as they do not have to repeatedly look at the same information.
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In conclusion, self-designed projects allow students to be passionate about the topic, resulting in the creation of better projects. Students can demonstrate their creativity, allowing them to effectively retain the learned information. They also become more self-reliant, which will help them when they get a job. Rather than assigning teacher-designed projects over the summer, schools should assign student-designed projects to stimulate learning, as well as shape students to gain skills that will help them succeed when they become an adult.
Concluding Statement
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In this article "The Challenge of Exploring Venus," the author gives many details throughout this text as to why he believes that studying Venus is a worthy persuit despite the dangers.
Position
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Given these details, he uses useful information that we need to know. In the first paragraph he describes what Venus actually is. If he wasn't to do that, people might be misleaded and still assume that Venus could perhaps be a star. The author gives very useful information to describe what Venus is.
Claim
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An example would be, "Often reffered to as "Earth's Twin, Venus is the closest planet to Earth in terms of density and size, occasionally the closest in distance too."
Evidence
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The author suggests that studying Venus is a worthy persuit despite the dangers it presents.
Claim
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The author supports their claim by giving numerous details and supporting his ideas."Striving to meet the challenge presented by Venus has value, not only because of the insight to be gained on the planet itself, but also because human curiosity will likely lead us into many equally intimidating endbeavors." A big issue that is brought up are the harsh conditions Venus brings. "On the planet's surface, temperatures average over 800 degrees Farenheight, and the atmospheric pressure is 90 times greater than what we experience on our own planet." Knowing this, you might think that they must stop there with their research because there's no way they can discover Venus now because it's to dangerous and harsh. That is false, "NASA's possible solution to the hostile conditions on the surface of Venus would allow scientists to float above the fray." Their solution is to have a vehicle hovering over Venus that would avoid the unfriendly ground conditions by staying up and out of their way. It would still be toasty but not deathly. The author claims, " Not easy conditions, but survivable for humans." The author supports his claim by saying yes, the temperature is a challenge they will face, but NASA has one particular compelling idea for sending humans to study Venus, and they will continue to challenge themselves and find solutions to these conflicts they face.
Evidence
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The author mentions, "More importantly, researchers cannot takes samples of rock, gas, or anything else, from a distance." Although this may be a challenge, the author states that many researchers are working on innovations that would allow their machines to last long enough to contribute meaningfully to their knowledge of Venus. In paragraph 7, it states that NASA is working on other approaches to studying Venus, and that it is possible and worthy of doing so. One project is looking back to an old technology called mechanical computers. "By comparison, systems that use mechanical parts can be made more resistant to pressure, heat and other forces."
Evidence
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The author does a good job by using details to support that although this is a challenge, they are willing to dive deeper into studying this "Evening Star" known as Venus.
Claim
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In coclusion, the authors final claim states, "Our travels on Earth and beyond should not be limited by dangers and doubts but should be expanded to meet the very edges of imagination and innovation." Although there are many dangers that could seek upon them, they take them as "challenges" and are willing to dig deeper to find out why Venus is the way it is. "Astronomers are fascinated by Venus because it may well once have been the most Earth- like planet in our solar system." Therefore, this is why the author does a good job by suggesting that studying Venus is a worthy pursuit despite the dangers it presents.
Concluding Statement
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Students should participate in at least one extracurricular activity
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they could make life long friends that have the same interest.
Claim
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For an example, if you join a club or sport and know nothing about it, you could ask someone in that club or sport to explain and help you understand more about it. After that, you just might have a new friend.
Evidence
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Students could join a extracurricular activity because they need a hobby
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Students who don't have any activities to do after-school should sign up for a sport or club because they could become really interested in it and keep doing that activity throughout the school year. Students should join extracurricular activities because they could be fun and it could be a new experience.
Evidence
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Students could join a extracurricular activity to make new friends.
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If you have a small friend group and want to expand, joining a club and/or sport would be a good option because there's always teamwork involved. Students could make friends just by having the same interest in a activity, subject, hobby, etc.
Evidence
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In conclusion I think joining a extracurricular activity is a good idea for students because they could make new friends and find a new hobby they like.
Concluding Statement
Adequate
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There's alot of extracurricurricular actiivitys you can participate in , but some people don't like to participate in activity's. Some of them can be boring making people not want to do them. Then theres some people that love doing activitys like that.
Lead
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It shouldn't be up to the principal if they want to participate in them or not.
Position
Adequate
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There is just some people that can't participate in things like sports
Claim
Adequate
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if doing extracurricular activitys could help peoples grades then i think the people that aren't interested in doing them would be more interested then. But for now they're just for fun and now days teenagers just want to hangout with friends and be on their phone.
Evidence
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There is some people that barely get to spend time with their family because they're so busy so they don't have time for activitys.
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With sports being a extracurricular activity there is some people that can't afford is
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because it can be exspincve and some kids/families don't have the money for that. Theres some kids that would love to do things like sports , but don't have transpartion or money and some schools don't always have rides for students to get back and forth.
Evidence
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Some students can't participate in things like that because they get in to much trouble
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*they only do it like that at some schools*
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I don't really see a point of having to do a extracrricular activity theres just no point. I don't think trying it once would hurt to see if you like it or not! If our principal made us do this i feel like it should be once a mouth because other people have other things to do and are busy , and i feel like the students should be able to pick what activity they want to do or not. And the teachers should put it in as a grade if they participate or not. End of teh story , i think theres no point in extracurricular activitys.
Concluding Statement
Adequate
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Why students should participate in extracurricular activities.
Lead
Ineffective
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You should consider doing a extracurricular activity
Position
Adequate
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participating in at least one extracurricular activity can help you branch out, make new friends,
Claim
Adequate
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you can have access to Currier interests.
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they can help you have a overall better experience at school.
Claim
Adequate
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Many enjoy doing these activities and find it very relaxing to get away from school for a while and try something new.
Claim
Adequate
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When you are doing something you enjoy, you can find people with the same interests as yourself. Many people like myself love doing extracurricular actives. For example I love doing FFA, I've met so many great people along the way. This organization has taught me so much, such as life lessons, leadership skills, and team building strategies.
Evidence
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this is a great way for students to interact with others.
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In addition they can participate in sports, working on the yearbook, and the debate team. Sports, is a great way for you to get the exercise you need, becoming more social with others, and being competitive with other teams. Working on the yearbook is a great way for students to take pictures, edit on computers, and take part in the making of the the yearbook. Finally the debate team, this club is for students who are very opinionated, strong willed, and are not afraid of public speaking. This club is great for students who enjoy arguing against others and communication well with other teams.
Evidence
Adequate
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You may decide to try something new and really enjoy it. In the future this could possibly be a Currier interest for you. For example if you choose yearbook, a Currier option for you could be photography. There are many options out there, but this one extracurricular activity you choose, could help you make that decision. On the other hand I would think about choosing one of these activities.
Evidence
Adequate
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you should consider doing at least one extracurricular activity. You can branch out,interact with others, and have access to Currier interests. These activities can really make you more skilled at what you love to do.
Concluding Statement
Adequate
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The author of this article uses many valid points and reasonings to support their idea.
Position
Effective
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They refer to Earth and it's compatability to Venus a lot.
Claim
Adequate
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They also use reasoning about Venus's temperatures and conditions.
Claim
Adequate
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In the second paragraph, the author states "...Often referred to as Earth's twin, Venus is the closest planet to Earth in terms of density and size, and occasionally the closest in distance too."
Evidence
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They are insuring that a helpful reason to research this planet would be because it is similar to earth, and a relative distance away.
Claim
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The author also states that "Venus was probably covered largely with oceans and could have supported various forms of life, just like Earth.". This shows the readers that Venus is worth studying because there may have been life on this planet. Therefore, NASA needs to send researchers to Venus to identify if there is life or not. The author gives another example by referencing Earth-like features to show that thesremay be some form of life or a way of nature, these references include Venus having mountains, valleys, and craters. This validates the authors point well.
Evidence
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The author also gives ideas on how to help make a possible trip to Venus easier and less dangerous.
Claim
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They talk about using a bump-like vehicle that orbits or hovers about 30 miles above the surface. This vehicle has benefits, and also gives disclaimers. Some benefits would include astronauts being able to explore the land easier, avoiding the "unfriendly" ground, and keeping good air pressure. the text states "however, peering at Venus from a ship orbiting or hovering safey far above the planet can provide only limited insight on ground conditions because most forms of light cannot penetrate the dense atmosphere, redndering standard forms of photography and videography ineffective." This shows as a disclaimer to give unbiased proof ofnegative effects.
Evidence
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This article is full of evidence to support the authors idea of studying Venus. The author referred to Earth, recommended ideas, and a technology project used with old computers to support their claim. In conclusion, this article had very well put-together evidence, and proves a point that Venus should be studied despite the dangers.
Concluding Statement
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Rules are a basic principle in the world. If you follow the rules, you don't get in trouble. In school, there are some classes that require students to learn over the summer break through an assignment. The purpose of these summer assignments is to ensure that students are maintaining or learning knowledge that will be used in the class the following year.
Lead
Ineffective
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Teacher-designed assignments are generally more effective than those created by students.
Position
Adequate
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They provide an accurate workload,
Claim
Adequate
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take more work off students,
Claim
Adequate
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educate them through a teacher-designed assignment.
Claim
Adequate
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Teachers should continue to create and design the summer assignments in order to ensure that students are learning the information needed for the coming school year.
Evidence
Adequate
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The amount of work dictated by a student-designed summer assignment is very likely to be little to none.
Claim
Adequate
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Work is a concept that no student enjoys. If students were to create their own summer assignment, they would spend even more time thinking about what they would want to do rather than actually fulfilling the needed criteria. If a Junior in High School is assigned a summer assignment in which they have full control, they would need to create a meaningful and efficient piece of work that would assist them in maintaining and learning the information needed for the class. Assuming that the student has a rigorous summer schedule, where would they have the time to effectively plan and carry out a summer assignment in which they can comprehend the information necessary for the class?
Evidence
Adequate
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Creating the work needed for a summer assignment is no easy task.
Claim
Adequate
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To effectively create the work, teachers need to understand the material, as well as understand which material is needed for the student to rehearse and learn over the summer.
Evidence
Adequate
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Students can not effectively prepare themselves for the class over the summer if they have no idea what material they need to cover, as well as how to cover it.
Claim
Adequate
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Student-designed summer assignments can be reliable in some cases. If you're a rising Senior in High School then you could use the opportunity to help prepare yourself for the future. It would be a valuable learning experience that you could use in your life.
Counterclaim
Adequate
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The problem is that the Seniors would continue to try and fudge their way through the system. They wouldn't be able to effectively learn and maintain the information if they are left to their own agendas. A student at Generic_School, Generic_Name, was told to do a project over the summer while following guidelines, while another student was told to just do a project. Both would take a test when they got back from break. Which student would most likely do better on the exam? The one who was assigned the guidelines, or the one that was more freelanced? Students need to follow guidelines in order to perform well on exams and the future.
Rebuttal
Adequate
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Summer assignments are not a favorite topic. When it comes to the whole idea of a summer assignment, we expect a teacher-based project that informs us on what information we need to learn and construct. Teacher-designed summer assignments allow for higher understanding of a subject, less overall work for students, and a more accurate workload that shows the knowledge of the student. Summer assignments are meant to help students learn and prepare for the next school year. They aren't meant to trick and deceive students into thinking that they can fudge their way through the course. Following the rules is how you will succeed.  
Concluding Statement
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My name is Luke Bomberger, and I joined the seagoing Cowboys program, and you should too.
Position
Adequate
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It helps animals that might not make it otherwise live until they get wherever they are going, then someone can take care of them and make sure that they are okay.
Claim
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All you have to do is feed them, clean them, and clean there stalls. It is not a hard job,
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there is also plenty of time for sightseeing and other things once you arrive at your destination.
Claim
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It makes sure that they get to a place where someone will take good care of them, or use them for milk, meat, eggs, and other things. The seagoing Cowboys program is very useful.
Evidence
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It doesn't even take long to clean there stalls if you keep up on the work. There is also sometime between pickups of the animals for yourself, or for playing with friends in the empty hold after animals have been delivered. Delivering the animals is always fun, seeing the smiling faces of the little kids riding there first horse, seeing there first cow, or anything else. It's guaranteed to bring a smile to your face.
Evidence
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and other things, such as riding a gondola in Venice, Italy, the city with streets of water. The sights you get to see are very beautiful sometimes, and tourist attractions are always fun to go see. It's an amazing thing to be able to see all of them while your still technically working. The sights are amazing, from mountains to mansions, you have the opportunity to see it all.
Evidence
Adequate
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the seagoing Cowboys program is a very helpful thing, and it woul;d be wonderful if you joined. We always like a little extra muscle. It really is awesome to go sightseeing, get tours of famous places, and see all the tourist attractions that you wouldn't even have a small chance at seeing if you weren't a seagoing Cowboys. Please join us, and have some fun while your at it.
Concluding Statement
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The conditions on venus aren't pretty. The tempertures get up to 800 degress fahrenheit. Humans can barely deal when it's a 100 degrees in Arizona. The carobon dioxide is so strong that we could survive it more than 10 minutes. Venus's surface tempertures are too hot to even walk on. Venus even has very dangerous weather like erruptng volcanoes, powerful earthquakes, and frequent lighting strikes to proes seekng to land on it's surface.
Evidence
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Where could we go if earth was to blow up? Mars. Venus or Mercury, We don't have a for sure answer to that
Evidence
Adequate
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Exploring Venus isn't a bad idea but very risky.
Position
Ineffective
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We could see what Venus has that could benefit ot affect Earth.
Claim
Adequate
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Considering Earth is the closet planet to Earth. NASA could potentially send robots in the spacecraft to see what information they can give.
Evidence
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No ones life should have to be put on the line to explore a diffrent planet. I personally think its a great idea. As said in the passage "Our travels on Earth and beyond should not be limited by dangers and doubts but should be expanded to meet the very edges of imagination and innovation."
Concluding Statement
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The Mona lisa demostration is relly intended to bring a simile to your face wihile . People are trying to do new ssttuf with new tecnology but some of this peoiple dont know that some times they do need to have or use tecnology they want to just do things as there way but some times they do need to use tecnology and do what they have to do so they can fix the old stuff and new stuff the monalisa just a little simle but they can fixii it withtecnology and try to do some thinh new they have to look for more tecnology and expressions to be sure that they are doing whta they have to do in expression of the wghat they have and maind.
Lead
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The doctor said that they dcan fix the or modify the expression or lesson from what they are talking about .
Claim
Ineffective
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They are trying to said that they want to invent a computer that knows when are you happy and when you are sad or angry and other caind of emottions. each they there are trying to have new tecnology and new stuff they have to see whats goin on in that they have to do what they have to do. Other peopl;e dont like to see other people expressions because they get enoy from seeintg them. They are seeing video games and trying to see what can they do to modofy them .
Evidence
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Seeing you in the miriror each they its like you are trying to see something diffirent that you can see becuse alreddy has the face that you have to see even tho they are not in the same expression ecah day becuse some times your actitud your face your simile arte the ones that can change with aout let you know each day you will hav a expressions that will change your face
Concluding Statement
Ineffective
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You should join the Seagoing Cowboys program
Position
Adequate
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you will be able to see many sights, and you do not need to fight in the war
Claim
Adequate
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You will also help many people by doing this job
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It is an unbelievable opportunity for many people to in joy helping people.
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Adequate
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you can also tour places all over the world.
Claim
Adequate
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being a seagoing cowboy is much more than an adventure it is also a lot of work
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you will also find time to have fun,especially on return trips after the animals have been unloaded. The UNRRA hired us seagoing cowboy to take care of horses,young cows,and mules.
Evidence
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so far I have told you about all the good things about being a seagoing cowboy it is also dangerous.
Claim
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On my second trip I was the night watchman my job was to report to the captian every hour to tell him how the animals were doing one rainy night I was making my hourly report I slid down a slippery ladder and craked one of my ribs
Evidence
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That is only some of the resons to join us sea going cowboys. The other resones you will have to figur out your self.
Concluding Statement
Adequate
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The author is very convinceing he didnt just say whats good nor did he say all what is bad.
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