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b50f3f8cd2f4	C3EEDCA21B42	Throughout grade school we all had a hard time adjusting to diffrent teachers as well as their teaching methods. However, if every teacher were to create a summer project to match thier teaching methods, students would be able to adjust to diffrent teaching styles which, not only would benefit the student themselves but it would also their raise their grades dramatically. Studies have shown that a student will perform better with teachers who he/she feels comfotable with, boosting their grades and overall academic perfomance.	Evidence	Effective
d03f55e64924	C3EEDCA21B42	School is hard, there is no question about it. Having the countless hours of homework, while needing to get eight hours of sleep pluse extracirruculars! Theres just not enough hours in a day! Having a project given to students would help adjust them into the swing of school by preparing them for the homework load they are about to be given. This will also prevent students from sleeping all day because they will need to do their project, and still have enough time to do what they want.	Evidence	Effective
9b029fdae2ff	C3EEDCA21B42	While a teacher designed summer project may be benefical, some may argue that students would do better with a student designed project because they understand the struggles of eachother and can help reduce how much work needs to be done while also teaching the student	Counterclaim	Adequate
d600e27a6d34	C3EEDCA21B42	This may help students feel less overwhellmed however it will not prepare them for the rest of their schooling years because as previously stated the course work only gets harder and simplifying the work load will not do anything.	Rebuttal	Effective
3f8fc334d6d1	C3EEDCA21B42	Summer time is exciting but when it comes to a end it can be upsetting. Feeling prepared for the year to come and all the work along with it could really help one in feeling less nervous, scared, and discouraged. Teachers need to design projects over the summer so students feel excited and ready for school to begin rather than to feel disapointed and unprepared.	Concluding Statement	Effective
09aa2d2e858c	C405CB0C12D2	Scientist are interested in exploring Venus but they find it very hard to explore it. Venus has high temperature that make it harder for them to be able to get a closer look at it which makes it a challenge for scientists for to even get a closer look at it. If Venus is Earth's sister planet why is it so inhospitable for us to live in it.	Lead	Adequate
4fe99c6f6bb1	C405CB0C12D2	Why are scientist wasting their time trying to explore it and how would we know what is actually in Venus if we haven't yet explored it.	Claim	Ineffective
0a9798188c68	C405CB0C12D2	I think it may be a bit to dangerous for any of us to actually be able to explore it without the right equipment and the right person to send there without knowing for sureif they would be getting hurt or not. I think it is to much of a risk to send someone up there and risk their lifes all just to be sure if Venus is safe or not.	Evidence	Ineffective
062741c50320	C405CB0C12D2	In paragraph 4 it states that "Long ago,Venus was probably covered lagely with oceans and could have supported various forms of life,just like in Earth"scientist could just want us to have a better future for our future kids and families along the way.	Evidence	Ineffective
8e76bcc291d0	C405CB0C12D2	In this pargraph it is saying that Venus could be another resource for us to use as an Evacuation if Earth is no longer safe for us we have a second choice.	Claim	Ineffective
32cda76c26c0	C405CB0C12D2	We may never know if we don't explore it but I still think it is a bit to much of a risk for us to take because we never know something could go terrible wrong and we all end up no longer exsisting.	Position	Adequate
4e5d1f5172dc	C405CB0C12D2	Earth has many similarities and many differences scientist want to be able to study Venus to be able to come up with new vehices another project is looking back at an old technology called mechanical computers. These devises make calculations by using gears and levers and don't require electronics at all. in article 8 it says tha we shouldn't be scared of what may happened all that matter s is what's right for the people.	Concluding Statement	Adequate
11bf188e8128	C4118746172C	In order to assure that students are learning over the summer, some schools require students to complete summer projects during their break. Some people believe that summer projects should be student-designed, while others believe that summer projects should be teacher-designed.	Lead	Ineffective
f81fbd82625f	C4118746172C	All in all, summer projects should be student-designed.	Position	Adequate
a28da3bdd2f8	C4118746172C	if projects are student-designed, then the students will actually want to do the project and learn things from it.	Claim	Adequate
f13e92c7e8b9	C4118746172C	most of the time when teachers give students projects, they are pretty boring and students don't want to do them. When students create their own projects, it gives them a little more motivation to do them because they're allowed to do it on whatever topic they want to.	Evidence	Adequate
80bffc6d0173	C4118746172C	if summer projects are student-designed, then students won't be as stressed about the project as they would if it were the teacher's project.	Claim	Adequate
ab76f96e5671	C4118746172C	the projects teachers give students are sometimes hard and it makes the students stress and struggle to get it done. When students create their own projects, it's less stressful because they get to choose what topic the project is about.	Evidence	Adequate
d28ffcba9d29	C4118746172C	Although these views are correct, there are some who disagree. Some people believe that students don't learn when creating their own projects to do. They also believe that students aren't capable of doing their own project without the assistance of a teacher.	Counterclaim	Adequate
3b3d8e86e10e	C4118746172C	However, students technically do learn because when they are doing research about their project, they are reading and learning things about it. Also, if the students need help with their project, they can get the help they need from a parent, friend, or a family member.	Rebuttal	Adequate
08977f8b79fc	C4118746172C	summer projects should be student-designed. When students design their own projects, it is easier for them and it motivates them to want to learn. Although some people may disagree, these views are correct. Students that create their own projects are less stressed out about the summer projects, therefore making them more likely to succeed on their summer project.	Concluding Statement	Adequate
3444ef81dd09	C44A40CDFF3A	Some schools require students to complete summer projects to assure they continue their learning during the break. Every individual at some point in their life has had to make a project of their own. Whether it be a project at school or a project at home for themselves to enjoy.	Lead	Effective
dee20612898b	C44A40CDFF3A	So when it comes to these summer projects, they should be student-designed	Position	Adequate
7d7d794653e2	C44A40CDFF3A	an individual has more freedom to choose a topic of their own,	Claim	Effective
8fa0ef41d03f	C44A40CDFF3A	they are less restrictive	Claim	Effective
df09aa34f84e	C44A40CDFF3A	students can use their best strengths to make a project that is less stressful for them.	Claim	Effective
e9e7dbdf3f32	C44A40CDFF3A	A student has more freedom when choosing a topic of their own with a student-designed project.	Claim	Effective
a1fa0507a9f8	C44A40CDFF3A	For instance, a lot of the projects in school are tied to a specific topic. When it comes to choosing the type of project, at a first glance, there may seem like there is a lot to choose from. But in reality, this is just the illusion of choice. There isn't a lot of room for creativity and imagination, therefore there isn't much freedom. Many individuals will agree that with more freedom, they have the liberties and creativity to come up with something that is unique.	Evidence	Adequate
8cf0a5953c38	C44A40CDFF3A	Others may argue that with more freedom, a student might not stick to what they what they are supposed to learn	Counterclaim	Effective
a41babd96230	C44A40CDFF3A	But that is far from the truth. It is the opposite, students are more restricted when they are forced to create a project with a topic they are not the best at, which leads to the next point.	Rebuttal	Adequate
15bc9d61a9e1	C44A40CDFF3A	Student-designed projects are less restrictive.	Claim	Effective
a368b7bd8b23	C44A40CDFF3A	For instance, much of the work we are assigned in school is teacher-designed. From personal experience, when a project is teacher-designed, a lot of the work can be mediocre, as apposed to a project that is student-designed. When students aren't allowed to come up with their own ideas, their imagination is bound and restricted. Some teachers may argue that it doesn't matter that students are restricted, all that matters is that a student gets the work done, but that is not correct. The student wont be as motivated and will turn in a project that is has no effort, therefore getting a lower grade.	Evidence	Effective
ea78b8df9f2b	C44A40CDFF3A	individuals can use their best strengths to make a project that is less stressful for them with student-designed projects	Claim	Effective
f9f39fb08077	C44A40CDFF3A	A project can seem like a large and outstanding task to finish for a large amount of students, and as a result, puts stress on an individual. A student-designed project can relieve plenty of this stress, as students can choose a subject that they are best at. It is easier for someone as they are more comfortable with a topic they are more knowledgeable with. Other individuals may argue that students should make an effort to choose a subject they aren't familiar with, but many can disagree because choosing a topic someone isn't familiar with puts more stress on a person and can lead to them struggling to learn.	Evidence	Adequate
627162083850	C44A40CDFF3A	Summer projects help students learn during the break, but students should ultimately decide on designing their own projects for individuals to continue to learn. At the end of the day, they should have the freedom to enjoy doing what they are best at they shouldnt be stressed over work they aren't comfortable with in the summer.	Concluding Statement	Adequate
3b12252d50f7	C4C3A58C5939	Venus is dangerous because its one of the closes starts to the sun.	Position	Ineffective
075e594deea1	C4C3A58C5939	Since venus is so close to it makes it the second hottest planet in space. Its hard for them to examine it closely because how hot it could be on the planet so the sit safe at a certain vantage point. Venus is close to earth witch makes itthe twin like in terms of density and size its close but distant a little from venus. So say if we get close to the sun earth woukd basically be like venus. Venus and earth is right around the corner from eachother so wat makes it different from eachother shouldnt the earth be hot too. To really think about it hot would it be if we were like venus. The atmosphere is 97 perdent of carbon dioxide blankets venus which could really explain where the heat come from or take place in. Theres acid in venus atmosphere the pressure is 90 times worst than what it would usally be on earth. Its over 800 degress on that plante which makes it a baby sum or the son of sun. Venus has one if the worst tempature ever it gets so hot that it woukd kill us humans in a instant if we think about it.	Evidence	Adequate
5fc01f60b34d	C4C3A58C5939	But they said venus is like the earth twin. So do you think that it was once life on that plantet before in the past and the sun ruined it so there no more life everything is excint on that planet.	Concluding Statement	Ineffective
c3278a962c2c	C4C6482B9C24	Venus, sometimes called the "Evening star" it is one of the brightest points of light in the night sky that is amazing. Well Venus is actually a planet. Venus is called the "Evening star" is one of the brightest points of light in the night sky. In our solar system Venus is the second planet from our sun. While Venus is simple from the distant but safe vantage point of earth it has proved a very challenging place to examine more closley. Often referred to as Earth"twin" Venus is the closest planet to Earth in terms of density and size and occcasionally the closest in distance too. Earth, Venus, and Marsour other planetary neighbor, orbit the sun at different speeds. These differences in speed mean that sometimes we are closer to Mars and other times in Venus. Maybe this is issue explains why not a single spaceship has touched down on Venus in more than threendecades. Numerous factors contribute to Vensu reputation as a challenging planet for humans to study, despite its proximity to us.	Evidence	Ineffective
0a8a75d16327	C4C6482B9C24	In conclusion this is why it is worthly to study about Venus. Itis very cool and interstead to learn about	Concluding Statement	Adequate
bca2e8c341b5	C4C6482B9C24	You could learn so much about Venus its really cool	Claim	Ineffective
d5165689d395	C4C6482B9C24	It is worthly to learn about Venus	Position	Adequate
2eb0ee32caf7	C4F0E1CA18F0	The author struggles to explain the advantages of what will happen if NASA explores Venus. It is close to impossible with the technology out right now for NASA to be able to explore Venus.	Position	Adequate
5d1c9bd66d21	C4F0E1CA18F0	It is really worth spending years and millions of dollars to build a spacecraft that will tell NASA about Venus. We do not even know if the spacecraft will even make it there knowing that the atmosphere is almost 97 percent carbob dioxide.	Evidence	Adequate
05b8c648f73f	C4F0E1CA18F0	The auothor of this excerpt thinks it will happen	Claim	Adequate
86b44e000118	C4F0E1CA18F0	In the excerpt "The Challenge of Exploring Venus" the author states "each previous mission was unmanned, and for good reason, sice no spacecraft survived the landing for more than a few hours" (Challenge). Landing spacecrafts on the Venus is almost impossible. There is too many factors that NASA will not be able to figure out for the next fifty years.	Evidence	Ineffective
d9e21b10d90b	C4F0E1CA18F0	Also the author says "today, Venus still has some features that are analogous to those on Earth" (Challenge).	Claim	Adequate
000f96227017	C4F0E1CA18F0	One of the major reasons why people still want to explore Venus is because astronomers believe that it was once covered in oceans. The author calls Venus "our sister planet" because of how it was formed, like Earth.	Evidence	Adequate
7b9b04de0760	C4F0E1CA18F0	Knowing the dangers of what might happen to someone or something on Venus is a very scary trip that many people are not willing to take.	Concluding Statement	Adequate
8cd80f507304	C5021AF61E5F	Do you think every body should do a extra curricular activity? Most people do activities but the school does not run them. A lot of schools dont even host good our a lot of programs. Most activities do not fit every body. After school things separate more time away from peoples family. If someone makes the team for a sport over a kid who wants it more then that person. The student that made it gets forced to do something he docent want to do, and ruins opportunities for other kids.	Lead	Effective
46d8237990cb	C5021AF61E5F	Students should not have to do a extra activity	Position	Adequate
62edaf4ea944	C5021AF61E5F	kid who want's it	Claim	Ineffective
2126e54d73ce	C5021AF61E5F	freedom	Claim	Ineffective
59f9d3da92ac	C5021AF61E5F	passionate.	Claim	Ineffective
128e16f52a6e	C5021AF61E5F	might not be able to achieve there goal. They put in extra work and grinding for along time. Some kids might just be there to say they are on a team or program. If every one had to do one extra activity things would get packed. They have been trying there best for a lot of years and just join something for free.	Evidence	Adequate
37466e666972	C5021AF61E5F	they like to go home play with there dog our younger siblings. next there some kids that like play video games and make money from that. Forcing kids do an activity might make sad if they get joked cause they do something wrong. Not every body parents or guardians can come pick the up after school. Theres a lot of kids out there like to do activities by them selves because it helps them focus.	Evidence	Adequate
096ac6809a9e	C5021AF61E5F	kids are passionate about there own activities	Claim	Adequate
49967e4e95e9	C5021AF61E5F	Having to do another activity can make some students irritated. Students are already at school for seven plus hours. Kids should follow there dreams stick to it and make new things happ	Evidence	Adequate
8b0ac35bfbaa	C5021AF61E5F	Having to do extra activity when just make the day if longer. They want to go home and live there life how they want to. Students should not have to do a extra activity kid who want's it, freedom, and passionate.	Concluding Statement	Adequate
3dc53e0e1d5c	C51752A9035C	Does working on a school project during your summer vacation sound fun to you? Instead of going out to the beach and see the red flower sun, would you rather stay inside a cold and damp house with flickering electricity, and waste your time doing work for school? For me, I'd choose the beach, no questions asked. Since I'm a teenager in high school, I know a thing or two about wanting some freedom for myself.	Lead	Effective
c3b5dabdf3b5	C51752A9035C	Summer projects should be student designed,	Position	Adequate
316ca8dcca6e	C51752A9035C	as much as it is beneficial for a student to remember the past lessons they've learned in school, hardworking students especially, deserve time for themselves to experience joy and free time from the hard work they've paid off doing.	Evidence	Adequate
c580e0b70605	C51752A9035C	students won't have to worry about time management,	Claim	Effective
b4f94b1ccd08	C51752A9035C	the work wouldn't be the issue,	Claim	Effective
558883e0ee1d	C51752A9035C	the students would be doing the work for the teachers.	Claim	Effective
13a38ed88be6	C51752A9035C	It really depends on the students schedules, for example, if a student works on a student designed project, and plays a sport in the summer like for instance soccer, the work could easily be completed if the student balances his or her time wisely, maybe playing soccer like at nine fifty in the morning, and working on the student designed project at one fifty in the afternoon, could balance the students time easily. Another example on how students wouldn't have to worry about time management is that, students could also make time to spend time with their families, if they ever plan on going to their cousins birthday, or go to their brothers or sisters sport games, students can choose what times work for them, and their work would have to be their second priority.	Evidence	Effective
04c98f2f5858	C51752A9035C	When students make work for themselves, they tend to understand what their own assignment or tasks mean to themselves. For example, students can make their own projects by using websites such as adobe spark or prezi. com , and can also make their own projects on Google PowerPoint. if the student knows how he or she could benefit themselves on making their own work, then the students can accomplish on being their own teacher. Another example on how the work wouldn't be the issue, is that the work itself would not be difficult to get done. when students make their own work, it may not have the same work level like a teachers work, but it can still be educational and it can be easier. If a student designed project was created on Google PowerPoint, then that would not be difficult to get done.	Evidence	Effective
8892ce01524f	C51752A9035C	The student is literally taking the role as a teacher to him or herself. For example, if a teacher is planning to go to Hawaii for the summer, but doesn't have time to create the project for him or herself, then they could ask their students for assistance on that. The students would be in charge of doing the work for the teachers and that could also help with the teachers time management. Another example of how the students would be doing the work for the teachers, if a teacher doesn't show up for summer school and if he or her is absent for it, then they could ask one of their own students to probably be one of the substitute teachers for the summer school.	Evidence	Effective
dae19f40b0af	C51752A9035C	, even if teacher designed projects could also be beneficial to a certain group of students, the knowledge being given to the students mind won't make as much of an impact as a student designed project would. People tend to forget that not all teenagers come from the same mentality of not being hard workers or not smart enough, every person in this world has their own intelligence within themselves, people just tend to forget and start to believe that they don't have a smart mentality. If teachers can have enough trust in their students and be willing to ask them for help, then that should be a sign that summer projects can be student designed. Therefore, if there are not enough teachers who can help make the projects for students in the summer, then students can try to help with that if they want to.	Concluding Statement	Adequate
9c1cc96346bd	C51A802386C6	The Mona Lisa is a subject painting by Leonardo Da Vinci who tried to show the perfect emotion of her, Mona Lisa's face 83 percent happy, 9 percent disgusted, 6 percent fearful and 2 percent angry, How could we know that in a neutral face? Is not magic, is just technology.	Lead	Ineffective
60a363e0634a	C51A802386C6	Now exist a new system that can recognize the emotions, thsi new innovation from Prof. Thomas Huang of the Beckham Institute with collaboration prof. Nicu Sebe of the University of Amsterdam, they are experts at developing better ways for Humans and computers to communicate, this actually is not like math homework when we can calculate. The process begins when the computer constructs a 3-D computer model of the face. Then, Dr Huang relies on the work of psychologists, such as Dr Pail Eckman creator of FACS (Facial Action Coding System). This man classified six basic emotions HAPPINNES, SURPRISE, ANGER, DISGUST, FEAR and SADNESS, and he associated each characteristic movement of the facial muscles. In fact,we humans perform this same impressive "calculation" every day, so, you can probablly tell how a friend is feeling simply by the look on her face. The Mona Lisa demostration is really extented to bring a smile to your face, while it shows just how much this computer can do, however the same technology can make computer-animated faces more expressive- for video games or video surgery. For now this is the answer for the questions of the beginnig, this is the new technology can do today, What will can do next?	Evidence	Ineffective
b05e398e2d36	C5569B2725B4	For me a car is very important , because if you have a car you can move to other places that you want . But not only that , if you have an emergency you can go rapidly,or in time . But this is not a facility in all countries and exist much problems with that , for example in Germany the street parking ,driveways and home garages , this are generally forbidden ,new district on the outskirts of Freiburg, near the French and Swiss. but in Vauban's streets are completly car free , this is so good , but with a limit ,like except the main thoroughfare , where the tram to downtown Freiburg runs. In conclucion:"As a result , 70 percent of Vauban's families do not own cars , and 57percent sold a car to move here". And this is in source 1. In source 2, in some countries exist prblems with traffic in the strees. One example is Paris ," 4,000 drivers were fined , according to Reuters ,27peoplehad their cars impounded for their reaction to the fine. But the traffic go down 60 percent in the capital of France , after 5 days of intensifying smog . But of course some countries have more that others , for example Paris typically has more smog than others europrean capitals , "Paris had 147 micrograms of particulate matter ,per cubir meter compared with 114 in Brussels and 79.7 in London , Reuters found . In Bogota, Colombia one day is celebreted as Car free day , but in once year occur somthing different , millions of colombians hiked , biked , skated or took buses to work during this day , leaving the streets without traffic jams . Paks and sports center also have bloomed throughout the city , uneven pitted sidewalks have been replaced by broad , smooth sidewalks , and others , restrictions have dramatically cut traffic . In conclucion the day without cars is part of an improvement campaign that began in Bogota in the mid 1990s .	Evidence	Ineffective
0ab57dd9198e	C5A3278EB458	Should there be a rule on everyone taking extracurricular activities. Yes because they provide information and fun for the students. Without after school activities students wouldn't of made as many friends as they have made. When I was in an extracurricular class we got to know the teacher better and see what she had to teach us. I met one of my friends today at an extracurricular activity because we had the same interest in soccer.	Lead	Adequate
b369ffef8193	C5A3278EB458	I agree that students should have to participate in one extracurricular activity	Position	Adequate
a2b3103e0819	C5A3278EB458	they can meet new students	Claim	Ineffective
57173119730c	C5A3278EB458	be active	Claim	Ineffective
8457475f69e1	C5A3278EB458	learn more about a subject.	Claim	Ineffective
111bb1aeaac6	C5A3278EB458	Extracurricular activities educate students about a specific topic that the students are interested in	Claim	Adequate
851db88dc819	C5A3278EB458	For example, I was in the soccer club in 6th grade and we learned about the history of the sport and how it started. The robotics club is where students learn about building and technology. It can help students learn tips and tricks about architecture and how to build things. That can help them in the long run if they want to join a field that uses robotic and architecture. It also teaches students how to work with others to solve a problem. Extracurricular activities serve as good learning chances for students.	Evidence	Adequate
19ec35e41600	C5A3278EB458	By taking extracurricular classes students get to meet new students and make friends.	Claim	Adequate
2a5ca7ec4f8f	C5A3278EB458	The students have common interest so they can talk to others and make friends. An extracurricular activity would be good for a shy student so they can get out of their comfort zone in a small group of people. Students can learn to share their ideas in an extracurricular activity because it is a small group and them they can get more comfortable to do it normal school. These friends can transfer over to normal school so kids that are quiet and don't have any friends will have someone to talk to, someone to work with during group work and, a friend. Extracurricular activities can help students make friends and come out of their comfort zone.	Evidence	Adequate
95e85e645f9e	C5A3278EB458	Being active is an important part of daily life. Extracurricular activities can help students be more active.	Claim	Adequate
f45211723074	C5A3278EB458	They give students something to do after school other than homework and sports. Students can catch up with their friends they haven't seen all day and give their parents a break. Extracurricular activities are good for teachers if they are bored and want to teach and have fun with their students. Extracurricular activities also count as the sports teams so you can be active by joining a sports team. For example, I joined the soccer club so i could be active. It was really fun and a good way to be active. Extracurricular activities are a good way to be healthy and active.	Evidence	Adequate
36f326889c4b	C5A3278EB458	Extracurricular activities gives lots of opportunities to students. They should make it mandatory to participate in at least one extracurricular activity. The activities have lots to give to the students. They should be mandatory for them so they can learn more and expand their view of learning. Extracurricular activities helps kids come out of their comfort zone and make friends. Extracurricular activities help students make friends, learn about a specific subject, and stay active.	Concluding Statement	Adequate
2c710fd5dcfc	C5B3EC7CBE65	the autor suggestds that we should explore venus, personally i think it not a good idea but the author really does not support it and gives great examples to why we shouldt go out a study this beautifle planet called venus.	Claim	Ineffective
b4b5fd3055d3	C5B3EC7CBE65	on paragraph 3 the author really gives us great exam-les of the problems of exploring this planet one great exaple that i think will convince people from not going is that the authomosphere of venus is really thick and it is 97 percent carbon dioxcide which is bad for us , and also the temprature on average is 800 degrees which is pretty hot.	Evidence	Ineffective
c0819b5b1606	C5B3EC7CBE65	As i saw read this part i noticed that the author isnt really against studiyng this planet he supports it.	Position	Ineffective
b60305ed7a58	C5B3EC7CBE65	On paragrapgh 4 he tells us that venus is simaller to earth becasue they have terrains just like ours, valleys,mountains ,and craters.	Evidence	Adequate
14fdcf2cc464	C5B3EC7CBE65	The author also shares with us and writes that Nasa's possible solution to exploring or studying this amazing planet without having to touch the surface	Claim	Adequate
2e45bd875acd	C5B3EC7CBE65	is float above the fray use an aircraft that is like blimp. This will only help them see the surface but they wont be able to collect rocks or soil which will be harder for them	Evidence	Adequate
641e604f49a8	C5B3EC7CBE65	One way Nasa is already working to be able to collect rocks is by using the computer used during World War 1 called mechanical computers.	Claim	Adequate
f076f46d4631	C5B3EC7CBE65	they can make calculation by usinf levers and gears. that way when they are up ther and send robots these can last longer and take data in, casue the modern computer tend to be fragile to heat. And in venus there is alot of heat. i believ the author really gave good details to why it is a good idea to studybthis amazing planet and really supported it now will see what time will show us	Evidence	Adequate
9b55329e1aa8	C5B3EC7CBE65	if we are the right thing like the aouthor writes "we should meet the very edges of imagination and innovation.	Concluding Statement	Adequate
1a77e201c569	C5C6DED9C790	i think it's pretty much safe for stop driving cars or give them away	Position	Adequate
85c8bdbc7a84	C5C6DED9C790	given your cars away will reduicing accidents	Claim	Adequate
225c664e76fe	C5C6DED9C790	more people will feeling safe when they walking in the streets and more parents will let their kids playing in the streets without asitated	Evidence	Adequate
5284813815a4	C5C6DED9C790	the air will be good and everyone breath very well	Claim	Adequate
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76ed495b4702	C5C6DED9C790	taking some one 's cars away will hurt some people 's feeling and this idea sound good to me because some teenagers keep making some fast cars and racing in the streets and there is some time most of them got their self killed or burning a life in the car if they can especially take those cars away it will be more safeand tey will stop dying in cars accident.	Evidence	Ineffective
288c3056ddbd	C5C6DED9C790	'as a result ,70 percent of vauban's families do not own cars,and 57 percent sold car to move to move here''i think those the talk about in this paragraph are acting smart,if all of those have been following those others example sold their and take the money you could probably feeling better or let them take it away from you won't feel good.	Evidence	Adequate

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Throughout grade school we all had a hard time adjusting to diffrent teachers as well as their teaching methods. However, if every teacher were to create a summer project to match thier teaching methods, students would be able to adjust to diffrent teaching styles which, not only would benefit the student themselves but it would also their raise their grades dramatically. Studies have shown that a student will perform better with teachers who he/she feels comfotable with, boosting their grades and overall academic perfomance.

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School is hard, there is no question about it. Having the countless hours of homework, while needing to get eight hours of sleep pluse extracirruculars! Theres just not enough hours in a day! Having a project given to students would help adjust them into the swing of school by preparing them for the homework load they are about to be given. This will also prevent students from sleeping all day because they will need to do their project, and still have enough time to do what they want.

Evidence

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While a teacher designed summer project may be benefical, some may argue that students would do better with a student designed project because they understand the struggles of eachother and can help reduce how much work needs to be done while also teaching the student

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This may help students feel less overwhellmed however it will not prepare them for the rest of their schooling years because as previously stated the course work only gets harder and simplifying the work load will not do anything.

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Summer time is exciting but when it comes to a end it can be upsetting. Feeling prepared for the year to come and all the work along with it could really help one in feeling less nervous, scared, and discouraged. Teachers need to design projects over the summer so students feel excited and ready for school to begin rather than to feel disapointed and unprepared.

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Scientist are interested in exploring Venus but they find it very hard to explore it. Venus has high temperature that make it harder for them to be able to get a closer look at it which makes it a challenge for scientists for to even get a closer look at it. If Venus is Earth's sister planet why is it so inhospitable for us to live in it.

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Why are scientist wasting their time trying to explore it and how would we know what is actually in Venus if we haven't yet explored it.

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I think it may be a bit to dangerous for any of us to actually be able to explore it without the right equipment and the right person to send there without knowing for sureif they would be getting hurt or not. I think it is to much of a risk to send someone up there and risk their lifes all just to be sure if Venus is safe or not.

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In paragraph 4 it states that "Long ago,Venus was probably covered lagely with oceans and could have supported various forms of life,just like in Earth"scientist could just want us to have a better future for our future kids and families along the way.

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In this pargraph it is saying that Venus could be another resource for us to use as an Evacuation if Earth is no longer safe for us we have a second choice.

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We may never know if we don't explore it but I still think it is a bit to much of a risk for us to take because we never know something could go terrible wrong and we all end up no longer exsisting.

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Earth has many similarities and many differences scientist want to be able to study Venus to be able to come up with new vehices another project is looking back at an old technology called mechanical computers. These devises make calculations by using gears and levers and don't require electronics at all. in article 8 it says tha we shouldn't be scared of what may happened all that matter s is what's right for the people.

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In order to assure that students are learning over the summer, some schools require students to complete summer projects during their break. Some people believe that summer projects should be student-designed, while others believe that summer projects should be teacher-designed.

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All in all, summer projects should be student-designed.

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if projects are student-designed, then the students will actually want to do the project and learn things from it.

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most of the time when teachers give students projects, they are pretty boring and students don't want to do them. When students create their own projects, it gives them a little more motivation to do them because they're allowed to do it on whatever topic they want to.

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if summer projects are student-designed, then students won't be as stressed about the project as they would if it were the teacher's project.

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the projects teachers give students are sometimes hard and it makes the students stress and struggle to get it done. When students create their own projects, it's less stressful because they get to choose what topic the project is about.

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Although these views are correct, there are some who disagree. Some people believe that students don't learn when creating their own projects to do. They also believe that students aren't capable of doing their own project without the assistance of a teacher.

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However, students technically do learn because when they are doing research about their project, they are reading and learning things about it. Also, if the students need help with their project, they can get the help they need from a parent, friend, or a family member.

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summer projects should be student-designed. When students design their own projects, it is easier for them and it motivates them to want to learn. Although some people may disagree, these views are correct. Students that create their own projects are less stressed out about the summer projects, therefore making them more likely to succeed on their summer project.

Concluding Statement

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Some schools require students to complete summer projects to assure they continue their learning during the break. Every individual at some point in their life has had to make a project of their own. Whether it be a project at school or a project at home for themselves to enjoy.

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So when it comes to these summer projects, they should be student-designed

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an individual has more freedom to choose a topic of their own,

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they are less restrictive

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students can use their best strengths to make a project that is less stressful for them.

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A student has more freedom when choosing a topic of their own with a student-designed project.

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For instance, a lot of the projects in school are tied to a specific topic. When it comes to choosing the type of project, at a first glance, there may seem like there is a lot to choose from. But in reality, this is just the illusion of choice. There isn't a lot of room for creativity and imagination, therefore there isn't much freedom. Many individuals will agree that with more freedom, they have the liberties and creativity to come up with something that is unique.

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Others may argue that with more freedom, a student might not stick to what they what they are supposed to learn

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But that is far from the truth. It is the opposite, students are more restricted when they are forced to create a project with a topic they are not the best at, which leads to the next point.

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Student-designed projects are less restrictive.

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For instance, much of the work we are assigned in school is teacher-designed. From personal experience, when a project is teacher-designed, a lot of the work can be mediocre, as apposed to a project that is student-designed. When students aren't allowed to come up with their own ideas, their imagination is bound and restricted. Some teachers may argue that it doesn't matter that students are restricted, all that matters is that a student gets the work done, but that is not correct. The student wont be as motivated and will turn in a project that is has no effort, therefore getting a lower grade.

Evidence

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individuals can use their best strengths to make a project that is less stressful for them with student-designed projects

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A project can seem like a large and outstanding task to finish for a large amount of students, and as a result, puts stress on an individual. A student-designed project can relieve plenty of this stress, as students can choose a subject that they are best at. It is easier for someone as they are more comfortable with a topic they are more knowledgeable with. Other individuals may argue that students should make an effort to choose a subject they aren't familiar with, but many can disagree because choosing a topic someone isn't familiar with puts more stress on a person and can lead to them struggling to learn.

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Summer projects help students learn during the break, but students should ultimately decide on designing their own projects for individuals to continue to learn. At the end of the day, they should have the freedom to enjoy doing what they are best at they shouldnt be stressed over work they aren't comfortable with in the summer.

Concluding Statement

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Venus is dangerous because its one of the closes starts to the sun.

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Since venus is so close to it makes it the second hottest planet in space. Its hard for them to examine it closely because how hot it could be on the planet so the sit safe at a certain vantage point. Venus is close to earth witch makes itthe twin like in terms of density and size its close but distant a little from venus. So say if we get close to the sun earth woukd basically be like venus. Venus and earth is right around the corner from eachother so wat makes it different from eachother shouldnt the earth be hot too. To really think about it hot would it be if we were like venus. The atmosphere is 97 perdent of carbon dioxide blankets venus which could really explain where the heat come from or take place in. Theres acid in venus atmosphere the pressure is 90 times worst than what it would usally be on earth. Its over 800 degress on that plante which makes it a baby sum or the son of sun. Venus has one if the worst tempature ever it gets so hot that it woukd kill us humans in a instant if we think about it.

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But they said venus is like the earth twin. So do you think that it was once life on that plantet before in the past and the sun ruined it so there no more life everything is excint on that planet.

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Venus, sometimes called the "Evening star" it is one of the brightest points of light in the night sky that is amazing. Well Venus is actually a planet. Venus is called the "Evening star" is one of the brightest points of light in the night sky. In our solar system Venus is the second planet from our sun. While Venus is simple from the distant but safe vantage point of earth it has proved a very challenging place to examine more closley. Often referred to as Earth"twin" Venus is the closest planet to Earth in terms of density and size and occcasionally the closest in distance too. Earth, Venus, and Marsour other planetary neighbor, orbit the sun at different speeds. These differences in speed mean that sometimes we are closer to Mars and other times in Venus. Maybe this is issue explains why not a single spaceship has touched down on Venus in more than threendecades. Numerous factors contribute to Vensu reputation as a challenging planet for humans to study, despite its proximity to us.

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In conclusion this is why it is worthly to study about Venus. Itis very cool and interstead to learn about

Concluding Statement

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You could learn so much about Venus its really cool

Claim

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It is worthly to learn about Venus

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The author struggles to explain the advantages of what will happen if NASA explores Venus. It is close to impossible with the technology out right now for NASA to be able to explore Venus.

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It is really worth spending years and millions of dollars to build a spacecraft that will tell NASA about Venus. We do not even know if the spacecraft will even make it there knowing that the atmosphere is almost 97 percent carbob dioxide.

Evidence

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The auothor of this excerpt thinks it will happen

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In the excerpt "The Challenge of Exploring Venus" the author states "each previous mission was unmanned, and for good reason, sice no spacecraft survived the landing for more than a few hours" (Challenge). Landing spacecrafts on the Venus is almost impossible. There is too many factors that NASA will not be able to figure out for the next fifty years.

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Also the author says "today, Venus still has some features that are analogous to those on Earth" (Challenge).

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One of the major reasons why people still want to explore Venus is because astronomers believe that it was once covered in oceans. The author calls Venus "our sister planet" because of how it was formed, like Earth.

Evidence

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Knowing the dangers of what might happen to someone or something on Venus is a very scary trip that many people are not willing to take.

Concluding Statement

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Do you think every body should do a extra curricular activity? Most people do activities but the school does not run them. A lot of schools dont even host good our a lot of programs. Most activities do not fit every body. After school things separate more time away from peoples family. If someone makes the team for a sport over a kid who wants it more then that person. The student that made it gets forced to do something he docent want to do, and ruins opportunities for other kids.

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Students should not have to do a extra activity

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kid who want's it

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freedom

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passionate.

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might not be able to achieve there goal. They put in extra work and grinding for along time. Some kids might just be there to say they are on a team or program. If every one had to do one extra activity things would get packed. They have been trying there best for a lot of years and just join something for free.

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they like to go home play with there dog our younger siblings. next there some kids that like play video games and make money from that. Forcing kids do an activity might make sad if they get joked cause they do something wrong. Not every body parents or guardians can come pick the up after school. Theres a lot of kids out there like to do activities by them selves because it helps them focus.

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kids are passionate about there own activities

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Having to do another activity can make some students irritated. Students are already at school for seven plus hours. Kids should follow there dreams stick to it and make new things happ

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Having to do extra activity when just make the day if longer. They want to go home and live there life how they want to. Students should not have to do a extra activity kid who want's it, freedom, and passionate.

Concluding Statement

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Does working on a school project during your summer vacation sound fun to you? Instead of going out to the beach and see the red flower sun, would you rather stay inside a cold and damp house with flickering electricity, and waste your time doing work for school? For me, I'd choose the beach, no questions asked. Since I'm a teenager in high school, I know a thing or two about wanting some freedom for myself.

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Summer projects should be student designed,

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as much as it is beneficial for a student to remember the past lessons they've learned in school, hardworking students especially, deserve time for themselves to experience joy and free time from the hard work they've paid off doing.

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students won't have to worry about time management,

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the work wouldn't be the issue,

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the students would be doing the work for the teachers.

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It really depends on the students schedules, for example, if a student works on a student designed project, and plays a sport in the summer like for instance soccer, the work could easily be completed if the student balances his or her time wisely, maybe playing soccer like at nine fifty in the morning, and working on the student designed project at one fifty in the afternoon, could balance the students time easily. Another example on how students wouldn't have to worry about time management is that, students could also make time to spend time with their families, if they ever plan on going to their cousins birthday, or go to their brothers or sisters sport games, students can choose what times work for them, and their work would have to be their second priority.

Evidence

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When students make work for themselves, they tend to understand what their own assignment or tasks mean to themselves. For example, students can make their own projects by using websites such as adobe spark or prezi. com , and can also make their own projects on Google PowerPoint. if the student knows how he or she could benefit themselves on making their own work, then the students can accomplish on being their own teacher. Another example on how the work wouldn't be the issue, is that the work itself would not be difficult to get done. when students make their own work, it may not have the same work level like a teachers work, but it can still be educational and it can be easier. If a student designed project was created on Google PowerPoint, then that would not be difficult to get done.

Evidence

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The student is literally taking the role as a teacher to him or herself. For example, if a teacher is planning to go to Hawaii for the summer, but doesn't have time to create the project for him or herself, then they could ask their students for assistance on that. The students would be in charge of doing the work for the teachers and that could also help with the teachers time management. Another example of how the students would be doing the work for the teachers, if a teacher doesn't show up for summer school and if he or her is absent for it, then they could ask one of their own students to probably be one of the substitute teachers for the summer school.

Evidence

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, even if teacher designed projects could also be beneficial to a certain group of students, the knowledge being given to the students mind won't make as much of an impact as a student designed project would. People tend to forget that not all teenagers come from the same mentality of not being hard workers or not smart enough, every person in this world has their own intelligence within themselves, people just tend to forget and start to believe that they don't have a smart mentality. If teachers can have enough trust in their students and be willing to ask them for help, then that should be a sign that summer projects can be student designed. Therefore, if there are not enough teachers who can help make the projects for students in the summer, then students can try to help with that if they want to.

Concluding Statement

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The Mona Lisa is a subject painting by Leonardo Da Vinci who tried to show the perfect emotion of her, Mona Lisa's face 83 percent happy, 9 percent disgusted, 6 percent fearful and 2 percent angry, How could we know that in a neutral face? Is not magic, is just technology.

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Now exist a new system that can recognize the emotions, thsi new innovation from Prof. Thomas Huang of the Beckham Institute with collaboration prof. Nicu Sebe of the University of Amsterdam, they are experts at developing better ways for Humans and computers to communicate, this actually is not like math homework when we can calculate. The process begins when the computer constructs a 3-D computer model of the face. Then, Dr Huang relies on the work of psychologists, such as Dr Pail Eckman creator of FACS (Facial Action Coding System). This man classified six basic emotions HAPPINNES, SURPRISE, ANGER, DISGUST, FEAR and SADNESS, and he associated each characteristic movement of the facial muscles. In fact,we humans perform this same impressive "calculation" every day, so, you can probablly tell how a friend is feeling simply by the look on her face. The Mona Lisa demostration is really extented to bring a smile to your face, while it shows just how much this computer can do, however the same technology can make computer-animated faces more expressive- for video games or video surgery. For now this is the answer for the questions of the beginnig, this is the new technology can do today, What will can do next?

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For me a car is very important , because if you have a car you can move to other places that you want . But not only that , if you have an emergency you can go rapidly,or in time . But this is not a facility in all countries and exist much problems with that , for example in Germany the street parking ,driveways and home garages , this are generally forbidden ,new district on the outskirts of Freiburg, near the French and Swiss. but in Vauban's streets are completly car free , this is so good , but with a limit ,like except the main thoroughfare , where the tram to downtown Freiburg runs. In conclucion:"As a result , 70 percent of Vauban's families do not own cars , and 57percent sold a car to move here". And this is in source 1. In source 2, in some countries exist prblems with traffic in the strees. One example is Paris ," 4,000 drivers were fined , according to Reuters ,27peoplehad their cars impounded for their reaction to the fine. But the traffic go down 60 percent in the capital of France , after 5 days of intensifying smog . But of course some countries have more that others , for example Paris typically has more smog than others europrean capitals , "Paris had 147 micrograms of particulate matter ,per cubir meter compared with 114 in Brussels and 79.7 in London , Reuters found . In Bogota, Colombia one day is celebreted as Car free day , but in once year occur somthing different , millions of colombians hiked , biked , skated or took buses to work during this day , leaving the streets without traffic jams . Paks and sports center also have bloomed throughout the city , uneven pitted sidewalks have been replaced by broad , smooth sidewalks , and others , restrictions have dramatically cut traffic . In conclucion the day without cars is part of an improvement campaign that began in Bogota in the mid 1990s .

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Should there be a rule on everyone taking extracurricular activities. Yes because they provide information and fun for the students. Without after school activities students wouldn't of made as many friends as they have made. When I was in an extracurricular class we got to know the teacher better and see what she had to teach us. I met one of my friends today at an extracurricular activity because we had the same interest in soccer.

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I agree that students should have to participate in one extracurricular activity

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they can meet new students

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be active

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learn more about a subject.

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Extracurricular activities educate students about a specific topic that the students are interested in

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For example, I was in the soccer club in 6th grade and we learned about the history of the sport and how it started. The robotics club is where students learn about building and technology. It can help students learn tips and tricks about architecture and how to build things. That can help them in the long run if they want to join a field that uses robotic and architecture. It also teaches students how to work with others to solve a problem. Extracurricular activities serve as good learning chances for students.

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By taking extracurricular classes students get to meet new students and make friends.

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The students have common interest so they can talk to others and make friends. An extracurricular activity would be good for a shy student so they can get out of their comfort zone in a small group of people. Students can learn to share their ideas in an extracurricular activity because it is a small group and them they can get more comfortable to do it normal school. These friends can transfer over to normal school so kids that are quiet and don't have any friends will have someone to talk to, someone to work with during group work and, a friend. Extracurricular activities can help students make friends and come out of their comfort zone.

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Being active is an important part of daily life. Extracurricular activities can help students be more active.

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They give students something to do after school other than homework and sports. Students can catch up with their friends they haven't seen all day and give their parents a break. Extracurricular activities are good for teachers if they are bored and want to teach and have fun with their students. Extracurricular activities also count as the sports teams so you can be active by joining a sports team. For example, I joined the soccer club so i could be active. It was really fun and a good way to be active. Extracurricular activities are a good way to be healthy and active.

Evidence

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Extracurricular activities gives lots of opportunities to students. They should make it mandatory to participate in at least one extracurricular activity. The activities have lots to give to the students. They should be mandatory for them so they can learn more and expand their view of learning. Extracurricular activities helps kids come out of their comfort zone and make friends. Extracurricular activities help students make friends, learn about a specific subject, and stay active.

Concluding Statement

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the autor suggestds that we should explore venus, personally i think it not a good idea but the author really does not support it and gives great examples to why we shouldt go out a study this beautifle planet called venus.

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on paragraph 3 the author really gives us great exam-les of the problems of exploring this planet one great exaple that i think will convince people from not going is that the authomosphere of venus is really thick and it is 97 percent carbon dioxcide which is bad for us , and also the temprature on average is 800 degrees which is pretty hot.

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As i saw read this part i noticed that the author isnt really against studiyng this planet he supports it.

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On paragrapgh 4 he tells us that venus is simaller to earth becasue they have terrains just like ours, valleys,mountains ,and craters.

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The author also shares with us and writes that Nasa's possible solution to exploring or studying this amazing planet without having to touch the surface

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is float above the fray use an aircraft that is like blimp. This will only help them see the surface but they wont be able to collect rocks or soil which will be harder for them

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One way Nasa is already working to be able to collect rocks is by using the computer used during World War 1 called mechanical computers.

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they can make calculation by usinf levers and gears. that way when they are up ther and send robots these can last longer and take data in, casue the modern computer tend to be fragile to heat. And in venus there is alot of heat. i believ the author really gave good details to why it is a good idea to studybthis amazing planet and really supported it now will see what time will show us

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if we are the right thing like the aouthor writes "we should meet the very edges of imagination and innovation.

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i think it's pretty much safe for stop driving cars or give them away

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given your cars away will reduicing accidents

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more people will feeling safe when they walking in the streets and more parents will let their kids playing in the streets without asitated

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the air will be good and everyone breath very well

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more people will stop getting ticket from police.

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taking some one 's cars away will hurt some people 's feeling and this idea sound good to me because some teenagers keep making some fast cars and racing in the streets and there is some time most of them got their self killed or burning a life in the car if they can especially take those cars away it will be more safeand tey will stop dying in cars accident.

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'as a result ,70 percent of vauban's families do not own cars,and 57 percent sold car to move to move here''i think those the talk about in this paragraph are acting smart,if all of those have been following those others example sold their and take the money you could probably feeling better or let them take it away from you won't feel good.

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