tasksource/argument-feedback · Datasets at Hugging Face

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00a0b8dd5e61	57076BE40C47	As stated in source 2 paragraph 5,"congestion was down 60 percent in the capitol of France, after five days of intensifying smog..." thats a big percent and with that we are making the earth green. France even tried to ban cars even and odd to reduce the pollution as being talked about in paragraph 2 and 3. They were being fined if they drove, that is atleast until the air cleared up.	Evidence	Adequate
bcc4115240fb	57076BE40C47	On the other hand, banning cars or not driving is a silly decision. It may be good for our earth and our health, but if you need to leave three hours before hand to reach your destination on time, then you need to buckle up and step on the gas. If gas so so bad for the enviornment, then why dont we ban gas cars?	Counterclaim	Adequate
fcd414de4ed3	57076BE40C47	There are many indrustries and or companys that have created electronic cars. Charging our cars many be difficlut for long road trips but there could be a slot for gas for when our battery level is running low we can get some gas to reach a destination and charge it.	Rebuttal	Ineffective
96667d44849a	57076BE40C47	Having fellow citizens limiting car usage can have many advantages, but also a few disadvanteages. Cars can clean up the air but also make us gasp for it. Having a car should be a choice we get to make. Having events and days where "no cars can be driven or you get a fine" is not needed in anybodys lives. What decision would you decide, having a car, or joining in on being green?	Concluding Statement	Adequate
ffb512aac4d1	5716C4DAFC9E	"SLAM!" Generic_Name throws the door back behind her. Generic_Name's mother flies down the stairs so fast, she nearly face plants into the wall ahead. "What's the matter honey?" "Ughh! My new principal just announced that all students are now required to participate in an extracurricular activity everyday after school, and i don't have any interest in that!" Generic_Name shrieks."Well why is that such a bad thing?" her mom says calmly."That's the point! i don't want to waste my time after school on something stupid like that. I would rather be relaxing by myself after all of my homework," Generic_Name answers irritably. "Come on, you could make new friends, and might surprise yourself with new interests."I think it would be really good for you," her mom explains. "Well I disagree," Generic_Name responds. "Please would you give it a try? I see opportunity for you here. I really do," Her mom pushes. "I don't need more people or friends in my life. Besides, none of the activities offered sound appealing to me at all," Generic_Name says. " How about cross country? You know your dad and i used to do it when we were younger, and when you were little you always talked about how you wanted to be a runner like me when you got older. Just try it, and if you really don't like it, i'll go talk to your principal about the requirement," her mom offers. "I don't know," Generic_Name contemplates. "Think about all of the great opportunities and things that could come out of this!" Generic_Name's mom says positively. "Please?" her mom tries one last time. Generic_Name sighs. "I guess," she finally agrees.	Lead	Effective
7ba28a042da9	5716C4DAFC9E	Forced extracurricular activities will benefit students in many ways, especially by motivating ones that do not typically do activities	Position	Effective
4f4af5ebbeff	5716C4DAFC9E	Our school should continue to require students to participate in extracurricular activities because it provides balance in their schedules,	Claim	Adequate
0a58ecd8dc63	5716C4DAFC9E	helps them to build new friendships	Claim	Effective
9cae5781665f	5716C4DAFC9E	and gives them the opportunity to try new things.	Claim	Effective
ffd5a723f367	5716C4DAFC9E	The first reason our school should continue to require extracurricular activities is because it provides balance in students' schedules	Claim	Adequate
3ca5d6ac516c	5716C4DAFC9E	Balance is one thing that is very important, especially when it comes to middle and high school; colleges look at whether a student can manage an activity with all of the school work as a big factor in the admissions process. For example, My older sister applied to UVA last year; She had straight A's, a great GPA and SAT score, but got denied because she wasn't a balanced student. She claims that if she would have had a required extracurricular activity, she would have had a better high school experience because it would force her to have a little more fun, which she needed at the time. Another example of the lack of balance is that my older brother comes home stressed and angry everyday because he's so determined about keeping his grades up in high school. His favorite sport used to be football, until his classes started getting harder and he stopped playing. However, next year he is going to step down from one of his hard classes, so he can play football again and still keep his grades up; therefore, he will regain his much needed balance again. If our school continues to require these extracurricular activities, it will prepare students for high school by showing them that they need to have a balanced school-work life to both mentally and physically succeed.	Evidence	Effective
bc33113a1dce	5716C4DAFC9E	The next reason our school should continue to require extracurricular activities is because it helps students build new friendships.	Claim	Effective
4f0aa8c22a9a	5716C4DAFC9E	It is very important to have good friends throughout middle school and high school because you will need people to talk to about things, support you in situations. and even just to share laughter and spend time with that aren't your family. For example, when i started middle school my parents made me try out for track, which i really didn't want to do. After a few days, i had made so many great friends that i could not only hang out with at practice, but i also then knew them at school. To this day, i am even better friends with those people, therefore, i can't imagine what my life would be like if i hadn't tried out for track. Another example is my older brother made his closest friends, Generic_Name and Generic_Name, in football when he first started high school. Before that, he didn't have many good friends; football really changed his life in that way, for i never see him happier than when he is with them.	Evidence	Effective
e775bfaead07	5716C4DAFC9E	The final reason our school should continue to require extracurricular activities is because it gives students the opportunity to try new things.	Claim	Effective
790a5f0c4ba8	5716C4DAFC9E	If you aren't required to do something, most of the time you probably won't do it unless it interests you; however if you are required to do something, you will be forced to do it no matter what, but you might surprise yourself, and find interest in that thing after all. Like mentioned previously, my parents made me try out for track when i first started middle school. At first, i wasn't the biggest fan of the idea, but i decided to give it a try; i ended up surprising myself, and Absolutely loved it. I was one of the best sprinters on my team, and found running to be a great way to release my negative energy from the day. Another example of this is my friend Generic_Name; she had no interest in sewing at all, but her mom forced her to try the sewing club at her school. Vivian ended up really enjoying it, and found it very therapeutic, as it was a great way to let out her stresses from the school day.	Evidence	Effective
21c68e7dac3a	5716C4DAFC9E	By continuing to extracurricular activities, schools will positively benefit students by providing balance in their schedules, building new friendships, and giving them the opportunity to try new things.	Concluding Statement	Adequate
db5d52a99c3b	572236CAAFCE	Why do nothing, when you can do something that will help you no and in your future?	Lead	Adequate
19efa470ad4a	572236CAAFCE	Students should be required to do at least one extracurricular activity.	Position	Adequate
aa963b93991e	572236CAAFCE	students will get to connect with others who have their same interests,	Claim	Effective
83d2474bf069	572236CAAFCE	Students get to meet kids that they normally wouldn't meet just in school,	Claim	Effective
19a796730d13	572236CAAFCE	students will get an example on what it is like to work with a team or group.	Claim	Effective
4001aeb7fe5c	572236CAAFCE	it is good for students to participate in one extracurricular activity because students will get to connect with others who have their same interests.	Claim	Effective
844f63fb6295	572236CAAFCE	People that have your same interests are different than people that you hang out in school. You hang out with people in school because they have the personality that you enjoy to hang out with. But, people with the your interests will understand you better and you will always have something to talk about. The people in your group will talk about the same things that you do. For example, a student wants to join the soccer team, and he doesn't know anyone. The student can is always able to talk to his teammates about soccer because they are on the same team. Then eventually, the student will no longer have to only talk about soccer because he has finally fit in to the rest of the kids. Finally, the kids that have the same interests as you will also be the people that you will talk to the most in or outside of school because you like to talk to them about your sport or group.	Evidence	Effective
73cbc0153e7f	572236CAAFCE	, it would be good for students to do an extracurricular activity because they will get to meet people that they normally wouldn't meet when you are in school.	Claim	Effective
fafecf37a8b4	572236CAAFCE	Joining a team or group will be nerve racking at first because you might not know anyone that share the same interests as you do. But when the team/group finally gets to talking, they will have bonded so that nobody could break them apart. It is important to get those types of relationships because if you ever need help to do something, then your team/group will have your back no matter what the problem is. In school, you choose who your friends are, and once you have your group, nobody else is allowed in. But when you join one a sports team, the student council, or the yearbook staff, then you set aside your school friends and you allow yourself to gain different friends. People that you once thought were "weird", or "annoying," are now your friends because you realized that they actually have the same personality that you do.	Evidence	Effective
1c0facd20ca7	572236CAAFCE	it is important to do at least one extracurricular activity because students will get a taste of the real world in having to work as a team to get things done.	Claim	Effective
80f0fd61e7e3	572236CAAFCE	If students don't get the opportunity to work with a group, and to work as a team, then they wouldn't be prepared for life when they are older. Learning to work with people is one of the most important things you need to know how to do. So the sooner that you start, the better the future that you will have. If you don't know how to work with people, then the path that is in front of you is rough because nobody will want to hire you, nobody will want to work with you, and nobody will have sympathy for you. Nobody will hire you because they will look at your back round and see nothing in you that will help them in their work space. Nobody will want to work with you because you will be mean and do little to no work. Finally, nobody will have sympathy for you because they know that you had every chance to be successful, but you chose not to be. Most people don't want that, do you?	Evidence	Effective
deb2c99cd1d0	572236CAAFCE	it would be smart for the principle to implement that students have to participate in at least one extracurricular activity because students will get to connect with others that have their same interests, students will get to meet other students that they wouldn't normally meet in normal school time, and the students will get an example on what it is like to work as a team and to prosper at doing your work. Starting with an extracurricular activity now will not only help you now, but it will help you later in life too.	Concluding Statement	Adequate
aada5ad6f81b	57280EFE34F4	I am doing a essay about technology to read the emotional expressions of students in a classroom is valuable	Lead	Adequate
25e804a84a21	57280EFE34F4	I dont think technology can tell someone in emotes by scanning their face.	Position	Ineffective
3053a814857f	57280EFE34F4	It cant go thou are mind and say they are feeling sad	Claim	Ineffective
5eada11f4288	57280EFE34F4	Us humans can tell if they are sad or happy because we have been thou the same things they are going thou.	Evidence	Adequate
1183b6981ca2	57280EFE34F4	If it is true I would not use because if they are using it as a govement weapon to find if some one is hinding some well needed things and they start to used this and if it gives them wrong information that person might be in some trouble	Claim	Ineffective
057d58ad3491	57280EFE34F4	And the other way around if they have some need information and the FACS or Facial Action Coding System just lost it.	Evidence	Ineffective
14a474264896	57280EFE34F4	If it can do this. This thing will be ahead in technology and clear a path for us in the near furture	Counterclaim	Adequate
5507d52b4449	57280EFE34F4	But I dont blieve this computer can tell people feelings.	Rebuttal	Adequate
a627dbac2c72	57280EFE34F4	First how big is it? Is it the size of a gym or is it as small as a Iphone 4? This computer is just a big fake.	Evidence	Ineffective
53a941c2c6e1	57280EFE34F4	Second how much does it cost? Is it the same to build it as much as a lamborigini or as much as a pencil? Third, how long does it take to build it. And how long does it last for. 1 minites or 3 hours. How long does it scan for.	Evidence	Ineffective
ce070588fc64	57596DF3AD20	Have you ever wondered how someone close to you was feeling, at any moment of the day? This new Facial Action Coding System can help you do exactly that. The system will be useful in many ways, but I think it can be very useful in the everyday classroom.	Lead	Effective
924aa1de04d7	57596DF3AD20	Teachers have always wondered how their students were feeling at all times during their lesson, and this software can help them reach out to their students tremendously	Position	Effective
0e9ef2275d50	57596DF3AD20	It can help with their lesson plan	Claim	Adequate
2dfb13444fa3	57596DF3AD20	their attitude	Claim	Effective
0104e273089a	57596DF3AD20	their teaching style	Claim	Effective
717229b24192	57596DF3AD20	Teachers make a lesson plan for the week and it can change depending on the circumstances.	Claim	Adequate
f99cb876884d	57596DF3AD20	Imagine being a teacher and being able to read the students' faces an emotions. In paragraph 6, it states that "the software can recognize when a student is becoming bored or confused." This can allow teachers to analyze the situation in which the classroom is in. If the students are generally happy, then you can go along teaching and educating them the same way as you did before. Now, what if the students were not so enthused about your lectures? If the students show a monotone facial expression, or maybe a bored and sad one, then it might be due time to go and fix your mistakes, make the plan more exciting, and get them excited about learning. This can improve their confidence and allow them to have a bright future.	Evidence	Effective
e93ff4f87de3	57596DF3AD20	The way students act in class often create a chain reaction, making the teachers either pleased or digruntled with the way the students behave.	Evidence	Adequate
e3c4099bc247	57596DF3AD20	If the teachers can read their expressions, change their lesson plan, and create a greatly improved learning environment, then everyone can go home happy.	Claim	Effective
28b0261c926c	57596DF3AD20	The students will listen more intently and the teachers will not have such a hard time dealing with their attitudes. In this scenario, everyone can get along well together and enjoy their time in the classroom.	Evidence	Adequate
25c747002b90	57596DF3AD20	In paragraph 3, it states that the software can "classify six basic emotions-happiness, surprise, anger, digust, fear, and sadness." Picking up these emotions on a student can change the way a learning environment works.	Evidence	Adequate
4991e6733dd3	57596DF3AD20	If the student is showing signs of negative facial expressions and emotions, then the teacher can alter their style of teaching.	Claim	Effective
a31fb18d9920	57596DF3AD20	They can create a warm and fun learning environment for the pupils, which can lead to them successfully gaining the knowledge they need to move on in life. The way a student acts in the classroom can affect many others around them and their attitude towards learning. If a teacher can detect even the slightest bit of negativity in the classroom, they can stop the spread and do their best to make learning fun and relatable for the students.	Evidence	Effective
9fb518f68c17	57596DF3AD20	This new software could be innovative for the way classrooms work in the future. If students could be educated the way they would want to be educated, yet still get the knowledge they need to succeed, then the future generation could be unstoppable. In paragraph 9 it states that "making faces can reveal so much about the science of emotions." There are no limits to what the next generation can do if it all starts with teachers being able to read the emotions of their students. The future starts here with this idea, and this software.	Concluding Statement	Effective
828f38d9fc56	575C00FBC60A	The passage talks about all the positive and negative things that would make Venus be good to study because of some of theories of it being Earth like	Position	Ineffective
680d5d45140c	575C00FBC60A	The study of life on Venus would have many hard obstacles to overcome and look deeper into. "	Claim	Adequate
254a3ebfb18b	575C00FBC60A	A thick layer of almost 97 percent of carbon dioxide blankets Venus.	Claim	Adequate
95a285987ffc	575C00FBC60A	That would be the biggest problem to try and fix because humans who take in too much Carbon Dioxide could potentially die. "These conditions are far more extreme than anything humans encounter on earth." That whole sentence by it self sums up how much of a complication it would be to study Venus	Evidence	Adequate
7e31d00b6060	575C00FBC60A	Astronomers are fascinated by venus that they want to know if it was once a earth like plant long before	Claim	Adequate
44c873f71d3e	575C00FBC60A	Everytime there are some good positives about the study of Venus there's always something negative following it. The National Aeronautics and Space Administration has a compelling idea for sending humans to study Venus. NASA's possible solution to the hostile conditions on the surface of Venus would allow scientist to float above the fray." This a positive input to how to discover some kind of basic of life. " However, peering at Venus from a ship orbiting or hovering safely far above the planet can provide only a limited insight on the ground conditions because most forms of light cannot penetrate the dense atmosphere,rendering standard forms of photography and videography ineffective." This is a barrier in research not being able to get full anwers is going to be hard to discover life.	Evidence	Adequate
a913e63aa3f2	575C00FBC60A	The study of Venus would make the scientist have to think harder and make more advance technology but they can do that until they get full answers on what they might come up on.	Concluding Statement	Adequate
72c75cd44c62	57691ED21F01	Everyone remembers mars the planet that Nasa was trying to get on to see if it's possible to live on? Well now they changed into a diffrent planet called Venus.	Lead	Adequate
d61d37a54eb4	57691ED21F01	The author of the article "The challenge of exploring Venus" is stating his choice on what Nasa is doing. He is making it very clear that he wants people to explore Venus.	Position	Adequate
16b99a56ea92	57691ED21F01	He gave a hint in one part of his story. For example he says "Striving to meet the challenge presented by Venus has valuse, not only becuase og insite to be gained on the planet its self."	Evidence	Adequate
536e84fcc404	57691ED21F01	He's is giving his full suport on Nasa's choice to go and study Venus. He also is saying to keep trying even though it is dangerous.	Claim	Adequate
d791336bd565	57691ED21F01	In the text it says that "A thick atmoshpere of almost 97% carbon dioxide blankets Venus."	Evidence	Ineffective
dc0d42731410	57691ED21F01	This Is saying that its very dangerousover there on Venus and the pressure could destroy everything there.	Claim	Ineffective
c239ef4544c5	57691ED21F01	In Conclusion he gives his full support no matter what. He is hoping that they keep striving to find a way to successsfuly accomplish whatever they need to do.	Concluding Statement	Ineffective
4b3e424b7794	57778A40CC36	i tthink we shouldnt be able to have technology read are emotions if we dont want it to.	Position	Ineffective
31f33673c442	57778A40CC36	in the artical its does a 3-d computer model of your face. and they didnt get all the emotions that everyone might have	Claim	Adequate
a97037fa36c5	57778A40CC36	like some people have deprrison and some might have the feeking of blah but you guys wouldnt know because you dont have that as a oppsion on there.	Evidence	Adequate
e1ba4ad248a0	57778A40CC36	they talk about how a home pc cant handle the complex algorithms used to decode someone simle. i think that should make it where no matter what you use it on it can run it. with out having to write it down	Evidence	Ineffective
309df4d93e16	57778A40CC36	what if someone is fake smiling. is your technology going to be able to tell if your really happy or not? I think it not a good idea because one it doesnt tell you all the emotions that the person is feeling and what if the person doesnt want one or doesnt like it and they aloud ti get rid of it or do they have to keep it. I know i wouldnt want someone else to tell me my emotions so i surely dont want some technology telling me how i feel .	Concluding Statement	Ineffective
a6dca16bc09f	578C014A7BBE	Venus is the second planet it also is the hottest planet which is never be touched i a spaceship since 3 decades. It is sometimes called "Evening Star' becuase it is one on the brightest points of the light in the sky. It was often told that the planet Venus was the twin of Earth because they have the same size, they often send numerous of spaceships to Venus to see if it would work out because when they would send some it would always burn through.	Evidence	Ineffective
bef7b22ade45	578C014A7BBE	Venus is a thick atmosphere of almost 90% of carbon dioxide in Venus. NASA's is doing investigations on how they can gp put some spaceships on the planet without buring down, so they are using high technlogy to go check the hot planet Venus. Scientist are working on approaching to study on Venus so they can be able to let people know more information about it.	Evidence	Ineffective
e3df0e93a9e4	578C014A7BBE	Finally. Venus is a planet close to the sun, its even the hottest planet ever. Nobody wants to go to Venus because its hot and you can die by going into Venus and knowing that scientists don't want to go put a foot on the planet because they're scared they going to die or anything bad is going to happened.	Evidence	Ineffective
15ad7cdc75ba	57CE6ED06513	In this article the author is telling us that facts about Venus how it's called the "Evening star" because it's the "brightest points of the light in the sky night" and it is a good place to examine, because of how close it is to the sun and earth, of its tempature, its heat, pressure, and how no spacecraft have landed there.	Lead	Ineffective
33a6bd79724d	57CE6ED06513	But it's really dangerous in Venus.	Claim	Adequate
a19104195fe4	57CE6ED06513	It's dangerous in because, a thick atmosphere of almost 97 percent cardon dioxide blankets venus, their is also clouds of highly corrosive sulfuric acid in Venus atmosphere, on the plants surface temperatures avaerage over 800 degrees Fahrenheit, and the atmospheric pressure is 90 times greater then whats in our earth.	Evidence	Adequate
37f490dc3351	57CE6ED06513	And If they were to explore venus NASA would need scientist to survive the hostile conditions on the surface of Venus.	Claim	Adequate
d6cf18754919	57CE6ED06513	They would need to make blimp-car like vehicles they need to hover for miles and miles becuase it's is 170 degrees fahrenheit which means they would burn real bad. and the lights need to be real good because they need to penetrate the dense of the atmosphere.	Evidence	Adequate
cb7bcbb02b7a	57CE6ED06513	I think they shouldn't explore Venus because it's a suicide mission it's too hot a lot of co2 and temperatures reach over 800 degrees Fahrenheit.	Position	Adequate
a4be4607b65e	57E1C649E187	The author has said that NASA has three pictures from the red planet. In the pictures is a face, from three different years (1976, 1998, 2001). The last picture has a clear image of the face. It has a cracked eye and to the left side.	Lead	Adequate
b7f9bc70d727	57E1C649E187	This is a rock that had just been formed like this. It had been forming to look like this for years.	Position	Adequate
0f534784811f	57E1C649E187	If it had not been discovered what would we think about the red planet. The planet would just be another planet close to earth.	Evidence	Ineffective
cadab14267c4	57E1C649E187	If we could get a human on the red planet that would be great. We can't do that yet. It will not happen for another 400 to 500 years. This is a long wait time, but in the end it is all going to be worth every hour put in. The red planet has many mysteres we will never know. This one will be around for years to come. The next generation will find out if life is out there. If they find it make contact.	Evidence	Ineffective
661fa0642db2	57E6768B4C73	Limiting car usage is something that we all need to do.	Position	Adequate
b320c43414de	57E6768B4C73	There are numerous ways of doing this; a person can car-pool or use other means of transportation	Evidence	Adequate
1baac1e34ce9	57E6768B4C73	Today my sister and I created a mess of emissions just getting to school to take this test that is completely worthless. I do not gain from this test, nor do my proctors who have to dilligently coach a hundrded students through a bogus set of instructions for this bogus test	Evidence	Ineffective
5383be510042	57E6768B4C73	Those emmissions are still rising.	Claim	Adequate
676a1896120b	57E6768B4C73	For each one person in the room where i'm taking this worthless test, hundreds of cubic feet in carbon monoxide gas have been released into the atmosphere. When this test is over it will be sent to some place, probably in the northern part of Florida for a bunch of people to grade. Test by test. They too must create huge emmissions to get to the place where they grade this test. Or do they? We have no idea who created this test, why we're taking it, or even the slightest insight of who's grading it or if it will even be graded! We're like a bunch of helpless test animals deprived of sleep because we have to write some bogus test. I look around me in this room and there is at least 40 people who I can see are pouring their hearts out on this test. I did yesterday, and for what? I cant be proud about this essay I just wrote, or even share it with my family, there is hardly even a record I took this darn thing. They tell us that we're setting the bar high for other schools but for what reason. Why would you strive to be better than someone who has writen their sole out on this essay. Its supposed to be special with origionality! These are supposed grades that you ace because you wrote a beautiful essay you cherished, and took pride in and even brought in other authors to make your work stronger, then you hear that that essay you submitted was to set the bar high for people we've never met. What kind of sick mind creates prompts for sudents to devote themselves to school and greatness and makes them take this whole thing just to see how it went? Why dont you make this thing worth a goal? Give us an incentive! It's so rediculous that I have to sit here and write about car emissions when I dont drive. You should turn this around on yourslef and ask why you did it. Why the hell do you need to test us on the daily basis like this. This test is an outrage and a discrase that should not even be thought about. I have better stuff to do. I want to learn about the things essential to me, not some foney worthless writing essay about car emmissions in France. This whole thing is so irrelevent to me it's sick. For me to use up energy and valuable time is something like this is not in charactar for me. And to think I have to sit here for another hour and thirty minutes. I feel sorry that my school and I have to put up with this crap. This test was a giant waste of time, you dont deserve my response and screw you for putting me and 500 other people through this. Before you even try to do this again ask yourself if what you're doing is right, if it's worth other peoples while. I want someone who made this test happen to read my little rant to see how students really feel. I know I speak for many of my peers with this writting. If you're just reading this and have nothing to do with me receiving this test, no hard feelings. Have a great day and thanks for taking your valuable time to read this. I hope its more compeling then reading about car emissions. :^)	Evidence	Ineffective
c8fbf4af3c55	57ED566E615C	Ever been rushed around? Have had so much to do in so little time? What if you had to do a extra activity on top of that? Would your life be hectic?	Lead	Effective
13021dd1f780	57ED566E615C	I disagree with making kids do extracurricular activity	Position	Adequate
60afc27cfc34	57ED566E615C	time is something that passes all the time	Claim	Ineffective
ced55961acb1	57ED566E615C	Not all of the students can get a ride	Claim	Adequate
329c22ed2bfd	57ED566E615C	adding this will cause the student to become more stressed.	Claim	Adequate
1e50e655aed1	57ED566E615C	Time. 24 hours a day. Students spend seven through 8 hours a day at school. Should be getting at least eight hours of sleep. This is leaving on eights hours to do homework, chores, ride or walk home, and spend time with family. If you add an extra activity this will take away from time at home. Some of the activities are fished late at night or are held in a place far away so it will take awhile to get home. This makes doing homework hard or even sleeping hard. If a student comes to school sleep it will make the work that they are doing decrease. When this happens the grades will drop slowly but surely. When they see that there grade has dropped this makes them upset and stressed. Creating this viscous cycle	Evidence	Effective
922e997fd143	57ED566E615C	Forcing kids to do after and during school activities will make free time vanish into thin air.	Claim	Effective
b9c56b1d0f2e	57ED566E615C	buses are the way students get to and from school. People who live far and close can take a bus. Even walk. If someone stays after school there is no bus to take them home. The either have to walk or find a ride. Some parents are busy or can't pick them up. What do you do about this? Giving a bus to take one or two kids home wouldn't make sense. If you do this option it will take awhile to find someone to do it or to find out if the kid has permeation from the parents.	Evidence	Effective
126c9acd5fe9	57ED566E615C	If you give students the choice to do things after school they can figure out if they need a ride or if they do not need a ride.	Claim	Effective
db5a1f40e450	57ED566E615C	Sols, testing, homework, grades, home life, drama, and family. All of these things are stressful. Life moves by so mast. Stress comes in and out of our lives all of the time. That is normal for humans. Even if we don't have stress in our lives homework and testing can just make you stressed.	Evidence	Effective
6b47177ad9e0	57ED566E615C	Making kids do extra activities will make students have less time for home, not all kids can get a ride home from school, doing this will ad more stress. Do you have enough time?	Concluding Statement	Adequate

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As stated in source 2 paragraph 5,"congestion was down 60 percent in the capitol of France, after five days of intensifying smog..." thats a big percent and with that we are making the earth green. France even tried to ban cars even and odd to reduce the pollution as being talked about in paragraph 2 and 3. They were being fined if they drove, that is atleast until the air cleared up.

Evidence

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On the other hand, banning cars or not driving is a silly decision. It may be good for our earth and our health, but if you need to leave three hours before hand to reach your destination on time, then you need to buckle up and step on the gas. If gas so so bad for the enviornment, then why dont we ban gas cars?

Counterclaim

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There are many indrustries and or companys that have created electronic cars. Charging our cars many be difficlut for long road trips but there could be a slot for gas for when our battery level is running low we can get some gas to reach a destination and charge it.

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Having fellow citizens limiting car usage can have many advantages, but also a few disadvanteages. Cars can clean up the air but also make us gasp for it. Having a car should be a choice we get to make. Having events and days where "no cars can be driven or you get a fine" is not needed in anybodys lives. What decision would you decide, having a car, or joining in on being green?

Concluding Statement

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"SLAM!" Generic_Name throws the door back behind her. Generic_Name's mother flies down the stairs so fast, she nearly face plants into the wall ahead. "What's the matter honey?" "Ughh! My new principal just announced that all students are now required to participate in an extracurricular activity everyday after school, and i don't have any interest in that!" Generic_Name shrieks."Well why is that such a bad thing?" her mom says calmly."That's the point! i don't want to waste my time after school on something stupid like that. I would rather be relaxing by myself after all of my homework," Generic_Name answers irritably. "Come on, you could make new friends, and might surprise yourself with new interests."I think it would be really good for you," her mom explains. "Well I disagree," Generic_Name responds. "Please would you give it a try? I see opportunity for you here. I really do," Her mom pushes. "I don't need more people or friends in my life. Besides, none of the activities offered sound appealing to me at all," Generic_Name says. " How about cross country? You know your dad and i used to do it when we were younger, and when you were little you always talked about how you wanted to be a runner like me when you got older. Just try it, and if you really don't like it, i'll go talk to your principal about the requirement," her mom offers. "I don't know," Generic_Name contemplates. "Think about all of the great opportunities and things that could come out of this!" Generic_Name's mom says positively. "Please?" her mom tries one last time. Generic_Name sighs. "I guess," she finally agrees.

Lead

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Forced extracurricular activities will benefit students in many ways, especially by motivating ones that do not typically do activities

Position

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Our school should continue to require students to participate in extracurricular activities because it provides balance in their schedules,

Claim

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helps them to build new friendships

Claim

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and gives them the opportunity to try new things.

Claim

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The first reason our school should continue to require extracurricular activities is because it provides balance in students' schedules

Claim

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Balance is one thing that is very important, especially when it comes to middle and high school; colleges look at whether a student can manage an activity with all of the school work as a big factor in the admissions process. For example, My older sister applied to UVA last year; She had straight A's, a great GPA and SAT score, but got denied because she wasn't a balanced student. She claims that if she would have had a required extracurricular activity, she would have had a better high school experience because it would force her to have a little more fun, which she needed at the time. Another example of the lack of balance is that my older brother comes home stressed and angry everyday because he's so determined about keeping his grades up in high school. His favorite sport used to be football, until his classes started getting harder and he stopped playing. However, next year he is going to step down from one of his hard classes, so he can play football again and still keep his grades up; therefore, he will regain his much needed balance again. If our school continues to require these extracurricular activities, it will prepare students for high school by showing them that they need to have a balanced school-work life to both mentally and physically succeed.

Evidence

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The next reason our school should continue to require extracurricular activities is because it helps students build new friendships.

Claim

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It is very important to have good friends throughout middle school and high school because you will need people to talk to about things, support you in situations. and even just to share laughter and spend time with that aren't your family. For example, when i started middle school my parents made me try out for track, which i really didn't want to do. After a few days, i had made so many great friends that i could not only hang out with at practice, but i also then knew them at school. To this day, i am even better friends with those people, therefore, i can't imagine what my life would be like if i hadn't tried out for track. Another example is my older brother made his closest friends, Generic_Name and Generic_Name, in football when he first started high school. Before that, he didn't have many good friends; football really changed his life in that way, for i never see him happier than when he is with them.

Evidence

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The final reason our school should continue to require extracurricular activities is because it gives students the opportunity to try new things.

Claim

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If you aren't required to do something, most of the time you probably won't do it unless it interests you; however if you are required to do something, you will be forced to do it no matter what, but you might surprise yourself, and find interest in that thing after all. Like mentioned previously, my parents made me try out for track when i first started middle school. At first, i wasn't the biggest fan of the idea, but i decided to give it a try; i ended up surprising myself, and Absolutely loved it. I was one of the best sprinters on my team, and found running to be a great way to release my negative energy from the day. Another example of this is my friend Generic_Name; she had no interest in sewing at all, but her mom forced her to try the sewing club at her school. Vivian ended up really enjoying it, and found it very therapeutic, as it was a great way to let out her stresses from the school day.

Evidence

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By continuing to extracurricular activities, schools will positively benefit students by providing balance in their schedules, building new friendships, and giving them the opportunity to try new things.

Concluding Statement

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Why do nothing, when you can do something that will help you no and in your future?

Lead

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Students should be required to do at least one extracurricular activity.

Position

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students will get to connect with others who have their same interests,

Claim

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Students get to meet kids that they normally wouldn't meet just in school,

Claim

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students will get an example on what it is like to work with a team or group.

Claim

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it is good for students to participate in one extracurricular activity because students will get to connect with others who have their same interests.

Claim

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People that have your same interests are different than people that you hang out in school. You hang out with people in school because they have the personality that you enjoy to hang out with. But, people with the your interests will understand you better and you will always have something to talk about. The people in your group will talk about the same things that you do. For example, a student wants to join the soccer team, and he doesn't know anyone. The student can is always able to talk to his teammates about soccer because they are on the same team. Then eventually, the student will no longer have to only talk about soccer because he has finally fit in to the rest of the kids. Finally, the kids that have the same interests as you will also be the people that you will talk to the most in or outside of school because you like to talk to them about your sport or group.

Evidence

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, it would be good for students to do an extracurricular activity because they will get to meet people that they normally wouldn't meet when you are in school.

Claim

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Joining a team or group will be nerve racking at first because you might not know anyone that share the same interests as you do. But when the team/group finally gets to talking, they will have bonded so that nobody could break them apart. It is important to get those types of relationships because if you ever need help to do something, then your team/group will have your back no matter what the problem is. In school, you choose who your friends are, and once you have your group, nobody else is allowed in. But when you join one a sports team, the student council, or the yearbook staff, then you set aside your school friends and you allow yourself to gain different friends. People that you once thought were "weird", or "annoying," are now your friends because you realized that they actually have the same personality that you do.

Evidence

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it is important to do at least one extracurricular activity because students will get a taste of the real world in having to work as a team to get things done.

Claim

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If students don't get the opportunity to work with a group, and to work as a team, then they wouldn't be prepared for life when they are older. Learning to work with people is one of the most important things you need to know how to do. So the sooner that you start, the better the future that you will have. If you don't know how to work with people, then the path that is in front of you is rough because nobody will want to hire you, nobody will want to work with you, and nobody will have sympathy for you. Nobody will hire you because they will look at your back round and see nothing in you that will help them in their work space. Nobody will want to work with you because you will be mean and do little to no work. Finally, nobody will have sympathy for you because they know that you had every chance to be successful, but you chose not to be. Most people don't want that, do you?

Evidence

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it would be smart for the principle to implement that students have to participate in at least one extracurricular activity because students will get to connect with others that have their same interests, students will get to meet other students that they wouldn't normally meet in normal school time, and the students will get an example on what it is like to work as a team and to prosper at doing your work. Starting with an extracurricular activity now will not only help you now, but it will help you later in life too.

Concluding Statement

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I am doing a essay about technology to read the emotional expressions of students in a classroom is valuable

Lead

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I dont think technology can tell someone in emotes by scanning their face.

Position

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It cant go thou are mind and say they are feeling sad

Claim

Ineffective

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Us humans can tell if they are sad or happy because we have been thou the same things they are going thou.

Evidence

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If it is true I would not use because if they are using it as a govement weapon to find if some one is hinding some well needed things and they start to used this and if it gives them wrong information that person might be in some trouble

Claim

Ineffective

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And the other way around if they have some need information and the FACS or Facial Action Coding System just lost it.

Evidence

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If it can do this. This thing will be ahead in technology and clear a path for us in the near furture

Counterclaim

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But I dont blieve this computer can tell people feelings.

Rebuttal

Adequate

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First how big is it? Is it the size of a gym or is it as small as a Iphone 4? This computer is just a big fake.

Evidence

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Second how much does it cost? Is it the same to build it as much as a lamborigini or as much as a pencil? Third, how long does it take to build it. And how long does it last for. 1 minites or 3 hours. How long does it scan for.

Evidence

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Have you ever wondered how someone close to you was feeling, at any moment of the day? This new Facial Action Coding System can help you do exactly that. The system will be useful in many ways, but I think it can be very useful in the everyday classroom.

Lead

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Teachers have always wondered how their students were feeling at all times during their lesson, and this software can help them reach out to their students tremendously

Position

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It can help with their lesson plan

Claim

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their attitude

Claim

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their teaching style

Claim

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Teachers make a lesson plan for the week and it can change depending on the circumstances.

Claim

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Imagine being a teacher and being able to read the students' faces an emotions. In paragraph 6, it states that "the software can recognize when a student is becoming bored or confused." This can allow teachers to analyze the situation in which the classroom is in. If the students are generally happy, then you can go along teaching and educating them the same way as you did before. Now, what if the students were not so enthused about your lectures? If the students show a monotone facial expression, or maybe a bored and sad one, then it might be due time to go and fix your mistakes, make the plan more exciting, and get them excited about learning. This can improve their confidence and allow them to have a bright future.

Evidence

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The way students act in class often create a chain reaction, making the teachers either pleased or digruntled with the way the students behave.

Evidence

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If the teachers can read their expressions, change their lesson plan, and create a greatly improved learning environment, then everyone can go home happy.

Claim

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The students will listen more intently and the teachers will not have such a hard time dealing with their attitudes. In this scenario, everyone can get along well together and enjoy their time in the classroom.

Evidence

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In paragraph 3, it states that the software can "classify six basic emotions-happiness, surprise, anger, digust, fear, and sadness." Picking up these emotions on a student can change the way a learning environment works.

Evidence

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If the student is showing signs of negative facial expressions and emotions, then the teacher can alter their style of teaching.

Claim

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They can create a warm and fun learning environment for the pupils, which can lead to them successfully gaining the knowledge they need to move on in life. The way a student acts in the classroom can affect many others around them and their attitude towards learning. If a teacher can detect even the slightest bit of negativity in the classroom, they can stop the spread and do their best to make learning fun and relatable for the students.

Evidence

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This new software could be innovative for the way classrooms work in the future. If students could be educated the way they would want to be educated, yet still get the knowledge they need to succeed, then the future generation could be unstoppable. In paragraph 9 it states that "making faces can reveal so much about the science of emotions." There are no limits to what the next generation can do if it all starts with teachers being able to read the emotions of their students. The future starts here with this idea, and this software.

Concluding Statement

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The passage talks about all the positive and negative things that would make Venus be good to study because of some of theories of it being Earth like

Position

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The study of life on Venus would have many hard obstacles to overcome and look deeper into. "

Claim

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A thick layer of almost 97 percent of carbon dioxide blankets Venus.

Claim

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That would be the biggest problem to try and fix because humans who take in too much Carbon Dioxide could potentially die. "These conditions are far more extreme than anything humans encounter on earth." That whole sentence by it self sums up how much of a complication it would be to study Venus

Evidence

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Astronomers are fascinated by venus that they want to know if it was once a earth like plant long before

Claim

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Everytime there are some good positives about the study of Venus there's always something negative following it. The National Aeronautics and Space Administration has a compelling idea for sending humans to study Venus. NASA's possible solution to the hostile conditions on the surface of Venus would allow scientist to float above the fray." This a positive input to how to discover some kind of basic of life. " However, peering at Venus from a ship orbiting or hovering safely far above the planet can provide only a limited insight on the ground conditions because most forms of light cannot penetrate the dense atmosphere,rendering standard forms of photography and videography ineffective." This is a barrier in research not being able to get full anwers is going to be hard to discover life.

Evidence

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The study of Venus would make the scientist have to think harder and make more advance technology but they can do that until they get full answers on what they might come up on.

Concluding Statement

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Everyone remembers mars the planet that Nasa was trying to get on to see if it's possible to live on? Well now they changed into a diffrent planet called Venus.

Lead

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The author of the article "The challenge of exploring Venus" is stating his choice on what Nasa is doing. He is making it very clear that he wants people to explore Venus.

Position

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He gave a hint in one part of his story. For example he says "Striving to meet the challenge presented by Venus has valuse, not only becuase og insite to be gained on the planet its self."

Evidence

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He's is giving his full suport on Nasa's choice to go and study Venus. He also is saying to keep trying even though it is dangerous.

Claim

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In the text it says that "A thick atmoshpere of almost 97% carbon dioxide blankets Venus."

Evidence

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This Is saying that its very dangerousover there on Venus and the pressure could destroy everything there.

Claim

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In Conclusion he gives his full support no matter what. He is hoping that they keep striving to find a way to successsfuly accomplish whatever they need to do.

Concluding Statement

Ineffective

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i tthink we shouldnt be able to have technology read are emotions if we dont want it to.

Position

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in the artical its does a 3-d computer model of your face. and they didnt get all the emotions that everyone might have

Claim

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like some people have deprrison and some might have the feeking of blah but you guys wouldnt know because you dont have that as a oppsion on there.

Evidence

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they talk about how a home pc cant handle the complex algorithms used to decode someone simle. i think that should make it where no matter what you use it on it can run it. with out having to write it down

Evidence

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what if someone is fake smiling. is your technology going to be able to tell if your really happy or not? I think it not a good idea because one it doesnt tell you all the emotions that the person is feeling and what if the person doesnt want one or doesnt like it and they aloud ti get rid of it or do they have to keep it. I know i wouldnt want someone else to tell me my emotions so i surely dont want some technology telling me how i feel .

Concluding Statement

Ineffective

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Venus is the second planet it also is the hottest planet which is never be touched i a spaceship since 3 decades. It is sometimes called "Evening Star' becuase it is one on the brightest points of the light in the sky. It was often told that the planet Venus was the twin of Earth because they have the same size, they often send numerous of spaceships to Venus to see if it would work out because when they would send some it would always burn through.

Evidence

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Venus is a thick atmosphere of almost 90% of carbon dioxide in Venus. NASA's is doing investigations on how they can gp put some spaceships on the planet without buring down, so they are using high technlogy to go check the hot planet Venus. Scientist are working on approaching to study on Venus so they can be able to let people know more information about it.

Evidence

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Finally. Venus is a planet close to the sun, its even the hottest planet ever. Nobody wants to go to Venus because its hot and you can die by going into Venus and knowing that scientists don't want to go put a foot on the planet because they're scared they going to die or anything bad is going to happened.

Evidence

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In this article the author is telling us that facts about Venus how it's called the "Evening star" because it's the "brightest points of the light in the sky night" and it is a good place to examine, because of how close it is to the sun and earth, of its tempature, its heat, pressure, and how no spacecraft have landed there.

Lead

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But it's really dangerous in Venus.

Claim

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It's dangerous in because, a thick atmosphere of almost 97 percent cardon dioxide blankets venus, their is also clouds of highly corrosive sulfuric acid in Venus atmosphere, on the plants surface temperatures avaerage over 800 degrees Fahrenheit, and the atmospheric pressure is 90 times greater then whats in our earth.

Evidence

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And If they were to explore venus NASA would need scientist to survive the hostile conditions on the surface of Venus.

Claim

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They would need to make blimp-car like vehicles they need to hover for miles and miles becuase it's is 170 degrees fahrenheit which means they would burn real bad. and the lights need to be real good because they need to penetrate the dense of the atmosphere.

Evidence

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I think they shouldn't explore Venus because it's a suicide mission it's too hot a lot of co2 and temperatures reach over 800 degrees Fahrenheit.

Position

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The author has said that NASA has three pictures from the red planet. In the pictures is a face, from three different years (1976, 1998, 2001). The last picture has a clear image of the face. It has a cracked eye and to the left side.

Lead

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This is a rock that had just been formed like this. It had been forming to look like this for years.

Position

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If it had not been discovered what would we think about the red planet. The planet would just be another planet close to earth.

Evidence

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If we could get a human on the red planet that would be great. We can't do that yet. It will not happen for another 400 to 500 years. This is a long wait time, but in the end it is all going to be worth every hour put in. The red planet has many mysteres we will never know. This one will be around for years to come. The next generation will find out if life is out there. If they find it make contact.

Evidence

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Limiting car usage is something that we all need to do.

Position

Adequate

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There are numerous ways of doing this; a person can car-pool or use other means of transportation

Evidence

Adequate

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Today my sister and I created a mess of emissions just getting to school to take this test that is completely worthless. I do not gain from this test, nor do my proctors who have to dilligently coach a hundrded students through a bogus set of instructions for this bogus test

Evidence

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Those emmissions are still rising.

Claim

Adequate

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For each one person in the room where i'm taking this worthless test, hundreds of cubic feet in carbon monoxide gas have been released into the atmosphere. When this test is over it will be sent to some place, probably in the northern part of Florida for a bunch of people to grade. Test by test. They too must create huge emmissions to get to the place where they grade this test. Or do they? We have no idea who created this test, why we're taking it, or even the slightest insight of who's grading it or if it will even be graded! We're like a bunch of helpless test animals deprived of sleep because we have to write some bogus test. I look around me in this room and there is at least 40 people who I can see are pouring their hearts out on this test. I did yesterday, and for what? I cant be proud about this essay I just wrote, or even share it with my family, there is hardly even a record I took this darn thing. They tell us that we're setting the bar high for other schools but for what reason. Why would you strive to be better than someone who has writen their sole out on this essay. Its supposed to be special with origionality! These are supposed grades that you ace because you wrote a beautiful essay you cherished, and took pride in and even brought in other authors to make your work stronger, then you hear that that essay you submitted was to set the bar high for people we've never met. What kind of sick mind creates prompts for sudents to devote themselves to school and greatness and makes them take this whole thing just to see how it went? Why dont you make this thing worth a goal? Give us an incentive! It's so rediculous that I have to sit here and write about car emissions when I dont drive. You should turn this around on yourslef and ask why you did it. Why the hell do you need to test us on the daily basis like this. This test is an outrage and a discrase that should not even be thought about. I have better stuff to do. I want to learn about the things essential to me, not some foney worthless writing essay about car emmissions in France. This whole thing is so irrelevent to me it's sick. For me to use up energy and valuable time is something like this is not in charactar for me. And to think I have to sit here for another hour and thirty minutes. I feel sorry that my school and I have to put up with this crap. This test was a giant waste of time, you dont deserve my response and screw you for putting me and 500 other people through this. Before you even try to do this again ask yourself if what you're doing is right, if it's worth other peoples while. I want someone who made this test happen to read my little rant to see how students really feel. I know I speak for many of my peers with this writting. If you're just reading this and have nothing to do with me receiving this test, no hard feelings. Have a great day and thanks for taking your valuable time to read this. I hope its more compeling then reading about car emissions. :^)

Evidence

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Ever been rushed around? Have had so much to do in so little time? What if you had to do a extra activity on top of that? Would your life be hectic?

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I disagree with making kids do extracurricular activity

Position

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time is something that passes all the time

Claim

Ineffective

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Not all of the students can get a ride

Claim

Adequate

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adding this will cause the student to become more stressed.

Claim

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Time. 24 hours a day. Students spend seven through 8 hours a day at school. Should be getting at least eight hours of sleep. This is leaving on eights hours to do homework, chores, ride or walk home, and spend time with family. If you add an extra activity this will take away from time at home. Some of the activities are fished late at night or are held in a place far away so it will take awhile to get home. This makes doing homework hard or even sleeping hard. If a student comes to school sleep it will make the work that they are doing decrease. When this happens the grades will drop slowly but surely. When they see that there grade has dropped this makes them upset and stressed. Creating this viscous cycle

Evidence

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Forcing kids to do after and during school activities will make free time vanish into thin air.

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buses are the way students get to and from school. People who live far and close can take a bus. Even walk. If someone stays after school there is no bus to take them home. The either have to walk or find a ride. Some parents are busy or can't pick them up. What do you do about this? Giving a bus to take one or two kids home wouldn't make sense. If you do this option it will take awhile to find someone to do it or to find out if the kid has permeation from the parents.

Evidence

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If you give students the choice to do things after school they can figure out if they need a ride or if they do not need a ride.

Claim

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Sols, testing, homework, grades, home life, drama, and family. All of these things are stressful. Life moves by so mast. Stress comes in and out of our lives all of the time. That is normal for humans. Even if we don't have stress in our lives homework and testing can just make you stressed.

Evidence

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Making kids do extra activities will make students have less time for home, not all kids can get a ride home from school, doing this will ad more stress. Do you have enough time?

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